We did some peer reviews on the Tupac: Nature vs. Nurture essay. Students are to get feedback from a tutor/teacher in the Writing Center. Prepare questions in advance. Use the revision guideline I gave you from Diana Hacker's Rules for Writers. I hope students have not erroneously concluded that the most importance part of the essay is the grammar.
It is not.
The most important part of the essay is its content; you can see as much looking at Stewart Pidd, even after he corrects his essays they will not amount to much because they don't make much sense and they aren't deep. Grammatically correct does not mean you get an A.
The SPHE authors wanted students to focus on the grammar because it often gets in the way of the writing, but students need to know how to write first. I don't think SPHE is a great book for the beginning writer because writing about Stewart's mistakes is not that exciting, unless one is a budding grammarian. I have tried to reconcile the grammar and the writing on their own, and I can't figure out how to get students to do the grammar quizzes and translate this into their own work. Students buy expensive grammar style books and do not read them. I miss being able to spend a time on argumentative writing, which I love, with students who I thought would breeze through SPHE, but they don't. No one breezes through SPHE. And at the end of the book, those passing all the essays still have trouble making that leap, that is, translating the grammar lessons into their own writing, but hopefully you will and this semester you are that much closer. I found that this second semester with Stewart Pidd I am much more confident and see an improvement in my writing. I have internalized the grammar and recognize errors more easily. There are rules I know and still others I struggle with, perhaps on the third semester I will be an even better writer, because it all counts and it all matters when we're looking for clarity and understanding.
Include a reflection (1 paragraph) on the feedback session(s): in class and at the Writing Center. You do not have to change your paper, just because someone makes a suggestion--that's all it is, a suggestion.
Today we took the Multiple Choice Exam 2. I hope the scores are better. Students also sent me a copy of the Censorship essay and gave me a copy. I will return it to you via email and in hand tomorrow.
If you are behind, drop the class. Some students gave me late essays today that are not perfect. Drop the class you have missed all deadlines. Take the class when you can put forth your best effort.
The Tupac essays are due in the morning. Students will present their essays on Monday, Nov. 29. Students will share their arguments and debate one another informally. Bring an outline of your key points with supporting evidence to class.
It is not.
The most important part of the essay is its content; you can see as much looking at Stewart Pidd, even after he corrects his essays they will not amount to much because they don't make much sense and they aren't deep. Grammatically correct does not mean you get an A.
The SPHE authors wanted students to focus on the grammar because it often gets in the way of the writing, but students need to know how to write first. I don't think SPHE is a great book for the beginning writer because writing about Stewart's mistakes is not that exciting, unless one is a budding grammarian. I have tried to reconcile the grammar and the writing on their own, and I can't figure out how to get students to do the grammar quizzes and translate this into their own work. Students buy expensive grammar style books and do not read them. I miss being able to spend a time on argumentative writing, which I love, with students who I thought would breeze through SPHE, but they don't. No one breezes through SPHE. And at the end of the book, those passing all the essays still have trouble making that leap, that is, translating the grammar lessons into their own writing, but hopefully you will and this semester you are that much closer. I found that this second semester with Stewart Pidd I am much more confident and see an improvement in my writing. I have internalized the grammar and recognize errors more easily. There are rules I know and still others I struggle with, perhaps on the third semester I will be an even better writer, because it all counts and it all matters when we're looking for clarity and understanding.
Include a reflection (1 paragraph) on the feedback session(s): in class and at the Writing Center. You do not have to change your paper, just because someone makes a suggestion--that's all it is, a suggestion.
Today we took the Multiple Choice Exam 2. I hope the scores are better. Students also sent me a copy of the Censorship essay and gave me a copy. I will return it to you via email and in hand tomorrow.
If you are behind, drop the class. Some students gave me late essays today that are not perfect. Drop the class you have missed all deadlines. Take the class when you can put forth your best effort.
The Tupac essays are due in the morning. Students will present their essays on Monday, Nov. 29. Students will share their arguments and debate one another informally. Bring an outline of your key points with supporting evidence to class.
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Debbie Adame
Professor Sabir
November23,2009
English 1A
Hip Hop
For many years hip- hop has been the main leading cause to extraordinary effects in peoples’ lives. Also, hip hop has been a dominating factor used by people to express their emotions as they deal and cope with their personal issues.In addition, people see in hip hop a sort of role model to follow and take action in their life’s; whether it is for better or for worse. I agree with Nathan MCCalls perceptions about his views about Hip- Hop and the outcome that hip-hop helped him progress in his life.
Nathan argues that hip hop “has been a way to resolve conflict in teenagers that work through the murky rites of manhood”. One could argue that teenager’s use hip- hop has a way to express their feelings and have their voice be heard for change. For example teenagers have always fought for their freedom rights of justice as an outcome to overcome with their rebellious acts. It has been known that "black kids" (juveniles) violence has escalated in extremes measures since the late years of nineteen-eighty nine, when the high popularity of “gangsta” rap was on the rise(30). This meant that not only the rapper of varies genres but also the "gangsters" were using hip-hop as an outlet to their feelings and for their voice to be heard. This is seen when many of the rappers and "gangsters" were using hip-hop in extreme measures, which led to violence. Kansas and North Carolina were known for violence when once a year it became headlines throughout the media.
Debbie Adame
Anyone that understands and can tolerate the high demands for hip-hop can also understand that hip-hop is not hip-hop for its lyrics; it is so because of its rhythm that speaks out its verses. Has MCCall states that hip-hop "is a phenomenon, the central part of an unorganized but powerful cultural movement -hip-hop that influences the way young blacks walk, talk, dress and think"(13).They way that hip-hop has aroused in the black communities has presided their evolution, to used hip-hop in varies fashion sways. For example in the rural communities, many young black men would describe hip-hop by using their hands( making movements) and using other body parts, making face jesters, like using their lips and moving their eyes to express the language of hip-hop. Many of their "hip-hop" remarks would result in conflict for those who see and take it in a negative way. For example it has become a real "big deal" criminal justice department because the police will not cope nor even tolerate the high demands for those who use hip-hop to overcome their state of mind.
Others use hip- hop to defend their believes and the cultural ways of their daily life. MCCall argues that hip-hop has been" more a case of life imitating art in the worst ways." He understand that hip-hop is been viewed as violent, for its lyrics that many rap artist have to used in their song to expressed out their emotions that has become a way to release their stress thoughts. "Apparently, many rappers believe their own hype, and some don’t hesitate to act on what they sing about." Rap has influenced many rappers and young blacks to commit the extreme and the unexpected that will forever take and effect in their life’s. For example Tupac Shakur got in trouble in varies occasions for attempting to resolve the conflict about rap in the media. Rap has also inspired MaCCall to overview the shadows of rap and the outcome of its art. "Obviously, “gansta” rap does not inspire every young listener to pick up a gun, but what I wonder is, what is the impact of all this on people already at risk?" Many who are at a risk to commit a violent act may listen to rap and revised the lyrics of its music and the story that has been written to prevent from committing such non indulgent act.
Hip-hop can help overcome tremendous obstacles for people that are having hard times in their lifes. Hip-hop can be used in varies ways such as cultural,fashion, and knowledge a successful future. If you used Hip-hop in a positive way it can help you guide you in life, and you will be not be at risk of getting into trouble nor being in danger. MaCCall learned from his mistakes and also from witnessing peoples mistakes and learn to value and use hip-hop as a way to succed in life.
John Rawson
Wanda Sabir
English 1A
Hip Hop in America
In the world of hip hop, the “Man” has contributed much to the destruction of the people who listen and participate in the culture. Immersion in the society, whether by choice or by influence; now a days no one follows in the footsteps of the hip hop greats with great beats and fantastic rhymes and deep messages in their music; instead people would rather rap about hurting people through violence, sexist remarks, homophobic stereotypes, and having a macho mentality. This message is delivered through violent and degrading lyrics by rappers who in fact don’t even know about being real responsible men, or about real rhyming. These attitudes are enforced through various facets of society, including politics, military, religion and consumerism.
Examining a culprit in society is the fundamental stereotype of the need and entitlement to a firearm. From the white man’s National Rifle Assocation’s (NRA) dependence on the 2nd Amendment right to the black and brown’s man standard of being more respectable if he has a more extensive collection of illegal weapons, the gun has taken on the traits of a human being. It takes on blame, guilt, possession and ultimately, value. According to Dyson, “There’s a preoccupation with the gun because the gun is a central part of the iconography of the ghetto.” (Dyson 91) Violent masculinity has become the standard.
These ideals of manhood are also expressed in the military segment of society by encouraging the admirable desire to protect one’s country by imposing our perceived values onto other countries by force and violence. Furthermore Dyson states, “On the domestic front we are quickly learning that domination of a woman is the only way to be an authentic man.” (Dyson 98)
That leads into the thought that there may be a possibility of a solution to the problem which Micheal Eric Dyson writes of, “Our perverted and distorted conception of strength and masculinity has lead to some devastating results and has limited the political options we’re able to pursue” (Dyson 97), which compels us to not accept the possibility of males to be aware of one’s self and his positive role in society so the encouragement falls short. Additionally, homophobia is an accepted part of sustaining the grand male mindset. The homosexual community even threatens the definition of strength because as Dyson clearly states; “Their presence throws things off,” (Dyson 119). Dyson identifies homophobia as an undiscussed subject in the world of hip-hop. As Dyson defends, religion in hp-hop can be viewed from the perspective of, “If hip-hop had a theology, it’s pretty consistent with the biblical justification of male misbehavior by blaming the seducing female.” (Dyson 110), circling back to the domination issue.
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When men do not necessarily play into the negative misconceptions of the hip hop culture, they will “Learn as black (and brown) men – whether in hip hop or business, academics or acting – that sexism and misogyny are our issues and do affect us as black (and brown) men…They will be far ahead of men in other quarters of the culture who may appear to be more enlightened,” (Dyson 122)
Works Cited
Dyson, Michael Eric. Know What I Mean? : Reflections on Hip-Hop. New York: Basic Citvas Books, 2007.
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