Today in class, now yesterday in class (smile), we reviewed Takaki's thesis and read a bit from the book. Students shared their literal and free paraphrases, some students more adept than others, but we will all get there in the coming weeks. If you can paraphrase a passage you definitely understand it. This is the value of summary and paraphrase--putting the text into your own words demonstrates one's comprehension.
It is also good to know the difference between paraphrase and summary. For each essay you write this semester, the citations include: 1 free paraphrase, 1 block quote and 1 in-text citation (less than 4 lines). This is all you are allowed for a three page essay, one citation per page. If the essay is four pages, you can have one more. The rest needs to be original writing.
We will practice signal phrases and types of citations in the coming week. Students are to read up to Part Two: Contradictions. Post your literal paraphrases here. Post your news article summaries at the assignment below. Some students did not indicate their source or the writer. I only noticed one works cited section and one student's heading it incorrect: Student name (first and last), teacher's name and title; course title, date.
Don't forget to comment on someone's post. Also, don't forget we will do the same thing on Sept. 11, due Monday, Sept. 13.
Lucia, I was listening to the radio this evening, KPFA, and Greg Bridges played a New Orleans band's version of Michael Jackson's Liberian Girl. There were no lyrics, but the music sounded nice.
Today (yesterday) in class we also talked about thesis sentences, essays--what are they, and I gave students a handout from the book, Writing with a Thesis on thesis sentences. Read the package and do the exercises.
We will go over it tomorrow.
It is also good to know the difference between paraphrase and summary. For each essay you write this semester, the citations include: 1 free paraphrase, 1 block quote and 1 in-text citation (less than 4 lines). This is all you are allowed for a three page essay, one citation per page. If the essay is four pages, you can have one more. The rest needs to be original writing.
We will practice signal phrases and types of citations in the coming week. Students are to read up to Part Two: Contradictions. Post your literal paraphrases here. Post your news article summaries at the assignment below. Some students did not indicate their source or the writer. I only noticed one works cited section and one student's heading it incorrect: Student name (first and last), teacher's name and title; course title, date.
Don't forget to comment on someone's post. Also, don't forget we will do the same thing on Sept. 11, due Monday, Sept. 13.
Lucia, I was listening to the radio this evening, KPFA, and Greg Bridges played a New Orleans band's version of Michael Jackson's Liberian Girl. There were no lyrics, but the music sounded nice.
Today (yesterday) in class we also talked about thesis sentences, essays--what are they, and I gave students a handout from the book, Writing with a Thesis on thesis sentences. Read the package and do the exercises.
We will go over it tomorrow.
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Patrick Schmidt
Professor Sabir
English 1A
August 30, 2010
Takaki Paraphrase Exercise:Chapter 1, Page 5
Takaki suggests that within my lifetime the demographic of America will have changed to the point that every individual ancestry will be a minority. He goes on to indicate that this is a future that is conflicting with the primary view of most people. Giving an example he indicates that current public school history classes teach next to nothing about non-European Americans. Our entire educational system has not incorporated the diversity that is the truth about our history, and that is a crime in several ways. Takaki concludes the paragraph by hypothesizing that ignorance leads people to be unaware of how much they don’t know due to misinformation and a blatant negligence of educators to inform them.
Lucia Fallah
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
30 August 2010
Takaki Paraphrase chapter 2 page 80-81
The Rise of Cotton Kingdom
These monsters will no longer slaughter our female and offspring’s, or interrupt the silence of our state line. They have vanished from the features of the soil. In their area of fresh ages groups will occur, who will understand their responsibility enhance. The firearm of fighting will be alter discuss for the appliance of the husbandry and the country which at this time wither is unproductive and appear to grieve the dissolution which, overspread it with flower at the rose turn into the garden of the sculpture. How regrettable it is the trail to harmony would direct across gore and over the care case of the slain nevertheless it is in the indulgence of that fortune which imposes fractions wickedness to crop universal good.
Rochelle Predovic
Professor Sabir
English 1A
31 August 2010
Takaki Paraphrase, page 5
When Oscar Handlin came after Jackson Turner, he studied people that relocated from Europe, indigenous peoples of the continent, and the “uprooted” from Africa, Asia, and Latin America. Oscar Handlin’s studies inspired him to write a book called The Uprooted, which has a subtitle: The Epic Story of the Great Migrations That Made the American People. This book would cover his studies about the exodus of and how immigrants are American History.
Work cited
Takaki, Ronald T. "A Different Mirror: The Making of Multicultural America." Introduction. A Different Mirror: a History of Multicultural America. Revised ed. New York: Back Bay /Little, Brown, and, 2008. 3+. Print.
Maxx Bartko
Professor Sabir
English 1A
31 August 2010
Takaki Paraphrase Exercise: Page 57
Once more, The Tempest illustrates this theme. The audience was shown a scene that was incredible in its foresight of the imminent events in Virginia. What the audience saw in the theater was a mixed-race proletariat revolution to depose Prospero. When the fool, Trinculo, and the butler, Stephano, first met Caliban, they thought him disgusting – a fish-like horror and demon. They administered him spirits, and the drunken native offered to show Trinculo all the “rich land of the island.” To his comrades, Caliban states his wish to be liberated from Prospero’s despotism:
Work Cited
Takaki, Ronald T. ""English and Negroes in Armes": Bacon's Rebellion." A Different Mirror: a History of Multicultural America. New York: Back Bay /Little, Brown, and, 2008. 57. Print.
Merty Brown
Professor Wanda
English 1A
31 August 2010
Paraphrasing Takaki (chapter 1 pg 80)
Jackson anger in messages he send to major general Thomas Pinckney. “I must wipe out those deceived victims (injured party) damned to disaster by their personal fidgety and violent behavior.” Named them “vicious animals”, he wrote: “it is by the cost I damage from eight to ten of them. I posses on all event well kept the scalps of my murder”. At the fight of horse shoe bend, Jackson and his soldiers frame eight hundred creeks and murder nearly all of them as well as females and infants. Later his troops made bridle reins from strips of skin taken from the dead bodies; they also censored off the edges of each corpse Indian’s nose for body calculation.
Lucia Fallah
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
27, August 2010
Hurricane Katrina Anniversary Summary
Five years ago the State of New Orleans was devastated; thousands of lives lost and almost the entire state cover with water. Over 125 billion in damages, today the reconstruction of New Orleans has improved drastically. Hurricane Katrina has scared the heart of all New Orleans citizens. President Barack Obama visited New Orleans to pay tribute to its reconstruction, an effort that continues today. Hurricane Katrina projected to root out the flooding of an entire city, leaving the United States government to consider Katrina as one of the most horrific natural disaster Americans has faced. For weeks after the storm, the world saw heartbreaking images of people stranded without food or shelter, and a federal response that roundly criticized the Bush administration. President Obama show his appreciation to the surviving victims of Katrina.
"It was a natural disaster, but also a man-made catastrophe - shameful breakdown in government that left countless men and women and children abandoned and alone," Obama said. Five years before this date, many were concern whether the state would become of what it was. Today New Orleans is counted as the most rapid growing cities in the United States.
Frena Zamudio
Professor Sabir
English 1A - 11:00-11:50am
30 August 2010
Takaki Paraphrase (page 3)
A different Mirror
I flew from San Francisco to Norfolk and was riding in a cab. The driver and I talked about the weather and the tourists. The sky was cloudy and twenty minutes away was Virginia Beach, where I was planned to give an important address to hundreds of teachers and administrators at a conference on multicultural education. The rearview mirror reflected a white man in his forties. “How long have you been in this country?” he asked. “All my life,” I replied, flinching. His question was one I had been asked too many times, even by the people from north with PhD’s. “I was born in the United States,” I added. He replied: “I was wondering because your English is outstanding!” Then I clarified: “My grandfather came here from Japan in the 1880s. My family had been here, in America, for over a hundred years now.” He looked at me in the mirror. To him, I did not look like an American.
Quan Lin
Professor Sabir
English 1A
8/30/10
Getting of the plane from San Francisco to Norfolk, I hitched a cab. Me and the driver talked about the weather and how the sky was cloudy, and how close Virginia beach was, where I was suppose to give a presentation to hundreds of teachers and administrators. The mirror showed a white person in his forties. He asked him, how long have you been living here, answered, forever that I’ve been alive. I’ve been asked this question a lot, his reasoning in asking me was due to the fact that my English was good. Then I told that my grandpapa migrated over to the US in the 1880s. even though I told him I was American, he saw me as something else.
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