Today we are practicing using ellipsis marks.
In Lit. Circles: Paraphrase the author's thesis or purpose for writing the book, Half the Sky.
Secondly, find 3 long citations--- 5+ lines of text (block quote) to support this claim.
Use ellipses in the citation.
Post on the blog. Do not omit page numbers.
Homework: Prepare Synthetica essay for Monday's exam and review grammar exercises for Grammar Exam 1. Email the essay to yourself. Choose three templates you feel represent your competency.
Check the ellipses marks with what I have given you.
Students will have 50 minutes to complete both. We will grade the Grammar Exam on Tuesday before the International Women's Day Party. Don't forget to bring in music and a poem or inspirational saying to share or something you've written about a woman you admire, different from the first assignment (smile).
These reflections will go into an International Women's Day blog post. If anyone wants to send photos of these women, I will post them as well.
In Lit. Circles: Paraphrase the author's thesis or purpose for writing the book, Half the Sky.
Secondly, find 3 long citations--- 5+ lines of text (block quote) to support this claim.
Use ellipses in the citation.
Post on the blog. Do not omit page numbers.
Homework: Prepare Synthetica essay for Monday's exam and review grammar exercises for Grammar Exam 1. Email the essay to yourself. Choose three templates you feel represent your competency.
Check the ellipses marks with what I have given you.
Students will have 50 minutes to complete both. We will grade the Grammar Exam on Tuesday before the International Women's Day Party. Don't forget to bring in music and a poem or inspirational saying to share or something you've written about a woman you admire, different from the first assignment (smile).
These reflections will go into an International Women's Day blog post. If anyone wants to send photos of these women, I will post them as well.
posted by Professor Wanda's Posse at 8:28 AM
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Tyler Mecozzi
Jacob Wise
Vanessa Rocha
Ronald Parker
Marcela
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8a.m.
3 March 2011
Nicholas D. Kristof and Sheryl WuDunn touch on three worldly abuses towards women: sex trafficking and forced prostitution; gender-based violence, including honor killings and mass rape; and maternal mortality.
Lifetime risk of maternal death is 1,000 times higher in a poor country than in the West. That should be an international scandal. The gap, moreover, is getting wider. WHO found that between 1990 and 2005, developed and middle income countries reduced maternal mortality significantly, but Africa reduced hardly at all. . . (99).
Sometimes it takes the form of honor killing, in which a family kills one of its own girls because she has behaved immodestly or has fallen in love with a man (often there is no proof that they had sex, and autopsies of victims of honor killings frequently reveal the hymen to be intact). . .(82).
In talking about misogyny and gender-based violence; it would be easy to slip into the conceit that men are the villains. But it’s not true. Granted, men are often brutal to women. Yet it is women who routinely manage brothels in poor countries, who ensure that their daughters’ genitals are cut, who feed sons before daughters, who take their sons but not daughters to clinics. . . (67).
Cherefah Obad
Julie Phoukeo
Jon Abdouds
Erin Callahan
Professor Wanda Sabir
March 3, 2011 8:00-9:00
The authors of Half the Sky, Nicholas D. Kristof & Sheryl Wu Dunn, Did a wonderful job with showing America the struggles that many empowered and repressed woman went through. Half the Sky is about “Turning Oppression into Opportunity for Women Worldwide” (cover). The authors did a great job with helping everyone understand that what we don’t know can hurt us. Half the Sky is an eye-opener. It uncovers the secrets, lies, and unfolds the truth about many third-world countries. It’s about what extremes women go through to achieve independence in their country.
India will not be free,
Until it’s women are free.
What about the girls in this country?
If girls are insulted and abused and enslaved in this country,
Put your hand on your heart and ask,
Is this country truly independent?
“As many times as I could, I would go back to fight for my children,” she remembered. “I knew they would not let me take my children. I knew they would beat me up. But I thought I had to keep trying” (8).
“Our own estimate is that there are 3 million women and girls (and a very small number of boys) worldwide who can be fairly termed enslaved in the sex trade. That is a conservative estimate that does not include many others who are manipulated and intimidated into prostitution. Nor does it include millions more who are under eighteen and cannot meaningfully consent to work in brothels. We are talking about 3 million people who in effect are the property of another person and in many cases could be killed by their owner with impunity” (10).
“The total numbers of modern slaves is difficult to estimate. The International Labour Organization, A UN agency, estimates that at any one time there are 12.3 million people engaged in forced labor of all kinds, not just sexual servitude. . .”(9).
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Tyler Mecozzi
Jacob Wise
Vanessa Rocha
Ronald Parker
Marcela
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8a.m.
3 March 2011
Nicholas D. Kristof and Sheryl WuDunn touch on three worldly abuses towards women: sex trafficking and forced prostitution; gender-based violence, including honor killings and mass rape; and maternal mortality.
Lifetime risk of maternal death is 1,000 times higher in a poor country than in the West. That should be an international scandal. The gap, moreover, is getting wider. WHO found that between 1990 and 2005, developed and middle income countries reduced maternal mortality significantly, but Africa reduced hardly at all. . . (99).
Sometimes it takes the form of honor killing, in which a family kills one of its own girls because she has behaved immodestly or has fallen in love with a man (often there is no proof that they had sex, and autopsies of victims of honor killings frequently reveal the hymen to be intact). . .(82).
In talking about misogyny and gender-based violence; it would be easy to slip into the conceit that men are the villains. But it’s not true. Granted, men are often brutal to women. Yet it is women who routinely manage brothels in poor countries, who ensure that their daughters’ genitals are cut, who feed sons before daughters, who take their sons but not daughters to clinics. . . (67).
8:43 AM
Anonymous said...
Cherefah Obad
Julie Phoukeo
Jon Abdouds
Erin Callahan
Professor Wanda Sabir
March 3, 2011 8:00-9:00
The authors of Half the Sky, Nicholas D. Kristof & Sheryl Wu Dunn, Did a wonderful job with showing America the struggles that many empowered and repressed woman went through. Half the Sky is about “Turning Oppression into Opportunity for Women Worldwide” (cover). The authors did a great job with helping everyone understand that what we don’t know can hurt us. Half the Sky is an eye-opener. It uncovers the secrets, lies, and unfolds the truth about many third-world countries. It’s about what extremes women go through to achieve independence in their country.
India will not be free,
Until it’s women are free.
What about the girls in this country?
If girls are insulted and abused and enslaved in this country,
Put your hand on your heart and ask,
Is this country truly independent?
“As many times as I could, I would go back to fight for my children,” she remembered. “I knew they would not let me take my children. I knew they would beat me up. But I thought I had to keep trying” (8).
“Our own estimate is that there are 3 million women and girls (and a very small number of boys) worldwide who can be fairly termed enslaved in the sex trade. That is a conservative estimate that does not include many others who are manipulated and intimidated into prostitution. Nor does it include millions more who are under eighteen and cannot meaningfully consent to work in brothels. We are talking about 3 million people who in effect are the property of another person and in many cases could be killed by their owner with impunity” (10).
“The total numbers of modern slaves is difficult to estimate. The International Labour Organization, A UN agency, estimates that at any one time there are 12.3 million people engaged in forced labor of all kinds, not just sexual servitude. . .”(9).
8:52 AM
Professor Wanda's Posse said...
The second group's post summarized the author's intention better than the first, which did not answer the question about "Why did the author's write the book?"
The first group did a better job with the block quotes. The MLA for the second group's citations is wrong.
Dereje Bizuneh
Andrew Duong
Tony San Nicolas
Thailea Boykin
Morgan LaPorte-Hilliard
Ashante Washington
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A, 9-950a
3 March 2011
Paraphrasing the Authors’ Purpose supported by Three Block Citations
Let us get right to the point: We hope for you all to become members in the new movement to free women and combat worldwide destitution by unleashing women’s authority as fiscal catalysts. This is what is being put into effect-not a spectacle of oppression but of empowerment, the type that converts effervescent adolescent girls from sex slaves into lucrative female entreprenuers (xxii).
“In 2008, Rath turned her cart into a stall, and then also acquired the stall next door. She also started a ‘public phone’ business by charging people to use her cell phone. So if you ever cross from Thailand into Cambodia at Poipet, look for a shop on your left, halfway down the strip, where a teenage girl will call out to you, smile, and try to sell you a souvenir cap. She’ll laugh and claim she’s giving you a special price, and she’s so bubbly and appealing that she’ll probably make the sale” (xviii).
“As for Neth, her new grocery shop initially did a booming business, since there was no other store in the village. She and her family were thrilled. . .” (41).
“In the cauldron of violence and misogyny that is eastern Congo, the HEAL Africa hospital where Dina was treated is a sanctuary of dignity. It is a large compund of low white buildings where patients are respected. It’s an example of an aid project that makes an extraordinary difference in people’s lives. And one of those helping patients like Dina is a young American woman named Harper McConnell.
Harper has long, dirty-blond hair and very white skin that seems to redden more than tan under the tropical sun. She dresses casually, and with the exception of African necklaces dangling on her collar, she looks as if she could be on an American university campus. Yet here she is in war-torn Congo, speaking excellent Swahili and bantering with her new friends who grew up in the Congolese bush. She has taken a path that more young Americans should consider – traveling to the developing world to ‘give back’ to people who desperately need the assistance” (88).
The citation by the group including:
Dereje Bizuneh
Andrew Duong
Tony San Nicolas
Thailea Boykin
Morgan LaPorte-Hilliard
Ashante Washington
does not begin with a paraphrase; it is a quote.
Review the rules for paraphrasing and repost next week.
The citations that follow do support the claim made by the authors. However, the spacing makes it hard to read.
When this assignment is reposted, please use adequate spacing.
Group 1
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8-8:50
3 March 2011
Theme paraphrase and 3 block quotes
Paraphrase:
The authors of Half the sky purpose of this book was to advocate for women around the world focusing on three particular abuses: sex trafficking where girls are traffic into sex, force Prostitution where women and girls are held against their will to have sex, and gender base violence where women are treated unequally base on her gender.
3 Block Quotes:
Forced prostitution is widespread in most conservative countries such as India, Pakistan, and Iran. The main reason is the traditions in this countries. Young men are not allowed to have premarital sex with with their girlfriends. The only way for them to receive thier sexual frustration is to buy a prostitute. Theupper-class girls
feel protected while men can find satisfaction in brothel. And if girl is uneducated or low-cast she has all chances to end up in brothel, while uppre-class girls keep their dignity... (6)
After going to Meena Hasina and Ruchira Gupta in Bihar, Nick entered Nepal at the border village crowded with shops and stalls where goods and clothing were sold. This one particular border is just one of many where Nepali girls are trafficked into India on a daily basis. They are valued because of their light skin, and other physical attributes. They are also valued because their lack of knowledge of the local language making it harder for them to escape. . .(23)
Ehlers merged those images and came up with a product she called Rapex. it resembles a tube, with barb wires inside. The woman inserts it like a tampon, with an applicator, and any man who tries to rape the woman impales himself on the barbs and must go to an emergency room to have the Rapex removed. . . The Rapex is a reflection of the gender-based violence that is ubiquitous in much of the developing world, inflicting far more casualties than any war. (61)
Group 1
Adrieanna Williams, Adalie Villalobos, Zinaida Dzhilavdaryan, Jeffrey To, Theodore Lionberger, Ernesto Castellanos
English 1A
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8-8:50
3 March 2011
Theme paraphrase and 3 block quotes
Paraphrase:
The authors of Half the sky purpose of this book was to advocate for women around the world focusing on three particular abuses: sex trafficking where girls are traffic into sex, force Prostitution where women and girls are held against their will to have sex, and gender base violence where women are treated unequally base on her gender.
3 Block Quotes:
Forced prostitution is widespread in most conservative countries such as India, Pakistan, and Iran. The main reason is the traditions in this countries. Young men are not allowed to have premarital sex with with their girlfriends. The only way for them to receive thier sexual frustration is to buy a prostitute. The upper-class girls
feel protected while men can find satisfaction in brothel. And if girl is uneducated or low-cast she has all chances to end up in brothel, while uppre-class girls keep their dignity... (6)
After going to Meena Hasina and Ruchira Gupta in Bihar, Nick entered Nepal at the border village crowded with shops and stalls where goods and clothing were sold. This one particular border is just one of many where Nepali girls are trafficked into India on a daily basis. They are valued because of their light skin, and other physical attributes. They are also valued because their lack of knowledge of the local language making it harder for them to escape. . .(23)
Ehlers merged those images and came up with a product she called Rapex. it resembles a tube, with barb wires inside. The woman inserts it like a tampon, with an applicator, and any man who tries to rape the woman impales himself on the barbs and must go to an emergency room to have the Rapex removed. . . The Rapex is a reflection of the gender-based violence that is ubiquitous in much of the developing world, inflicting far more casualties than any war. (61)
Cody Henneman
Reagan Lolo
Mahmood Koghadai
Eman Obad
Ramsay Jackson
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8:00am-8:50am
Thesis:
Nicholas D. Kristof and Sheryl WuDunn's thesis of half the sky is to portray the hardships of women in the majority of societies around the world, and to warn the world about the rising problem. Also, they want to inform, and raise people’s awareness so that they may become more involve in changing those inhumane treatment of people, particularly for girls and women. Kristof and WuDunn’s motivations to write the book go like this:
quote 1: So let us be clear about this up front: We hope to recruit you to join an incipient movement to emancipate women and fight global poverty by unlocking women’s power as economic catalysts. That is the process underway—not a drama of victimization but of empowerment, the kind that transform bubbly teenage girls from brothel slaves into successful businesswomen. This is a story of transformation. It is change that is already taking place… ( xxii, last intro page).
quote 2: People always ask how they can help. Given concern about corruption, waste, and mismanagement, how can one actually help women like Meena and defeat modern slavery? Is the anything an ordinary person can do?
A starting point is to brutally realistic about the complexities of achieving change… (p 17, 1st paragraph).
quote 3:The tools to crush modern slavery exist, but political will is lacking. That must be the starting point of any abolitionist movement. We are not arguing that westerners should take up the cause because it’s the fault of the west; Western men do not play a central role in prostitution in most poor countries. True American and European sex tourists are part of the problem in Thailand, the Philippines, Sri Lanka, and Belize, but they are still a small percentage of the johns… (24 last paragraph).
David Ozda
David Guzman
Sherri Short
Amani Ali
Farhad Rahimi
Paraphrase of Thesis:
Half the Sky focuses on creating awareness and organization toward helping abused women, mainly in the categories of: violence based on gender, such as honor killings and mass rape; women dying in childbirth, which kills a woman a minute; and sex trafficking or forced prostitution. There is a real opportunity to help the women of the world, right now, and citizens of first-world countries can really make a difference.
Hopefully, after reading the book, many will join this cause to help liberate women and improve the global economy by letting women have a role in world business. This can help oppressed women change into productive and independent income earners. Any person who feels compassion for this cause can help shorten the time it takes to improve life for abused women of the world.
Block Quotes:
In the book Half the Sky, the authors refer to maternal mortality as one of the problems that kills more women in the world: Demographic explosion can not just be stopped by distributing birth control supplies, but by spreading the word that having smaller families is beneficial. One way to do that is proving that kids won’t die early. Knowing that the less number of kids people have, the more chances are for those kids to survive. Educating people, especially girls, might be the best way to promote smaller families. It makes them more conscious about the risk of bringing unwanted kids to the world. The use of contraceptives is complementary. (Kristof and WuDunn 135).
Saima Muhammad is an example of a formerly oppressed woman whose power as a woman was unleashed and became an economic catalyst for her family. As such, she not only brought income into her ‘desperately poor’ household but also to her village overall, as written by Nobel Prize winners Kristof and WuDunn:
“ . . . Saima joined a women’s solidarity group affiliated with a Pakistani microfinance organization called Kashf Foundation. Saima took out a $65 loan and used the money to buy beads and cloth, which she transformed into beautiful embroidery to sell in the markets of Lahore. She used the profit to buy more beads and cloth, and soon she had an embroidery business and was earning a solid income- the only in in her household to do so. Saima brought her eldest daughter back from the aunt and began paying off her husband’s debt.
When merchants wanted more embroidery than Saima could produce, she paid neighbors to work for her. Eventually thirty families were working for Saima, and she put her husband to work as well- “under my direction,” she explained with a twinkle in her eye. Saima became the tycoon of the neighborhood and she was able to pay off her husband’s entire debt, keep her daughters in school, renovate the house, connect running water to the house, and buy a television.
“Now everyone comes to me to borrow money, the same ones who used to criticize me,” Saima said, beaming in satisfaction” (186).
(continued in next post)
David Ozda
David Guzman
Sherri Short
Amani Ali
Farhad Rahimi
English 1A
9-9:50
continuation of Block Quotes:
In the section of, ‘Is Islam Misogynistic?’, it questions the repression of women by stating that in 30 percent of Muslim countries, the women are oppressed and have no say so. In Half the Sky, it states that, “Some evidence suggests that where families repress women, governments end up repressing all citizens. The status of women, more than other factors that predominate in Western thinking about religious systems and politics, links Islam and the democracy deficit. That may be because an authoritarian and patriarchal home environment is mirrored in an authoritarian and political system” (159). To try and help this crisis, it would have to start with the government for the people to come together and fight for this to manifest.
The Authors, Nicholas D. Kristof and Sheryl WuDunn focus on women's issues around the globe, trying to bring to the readers attention the oppressive state some live in, from sex trafficking and forced prostitution to honor killings. “Rescuing girls from the brothel is the easy part, however. The challenge is keeping them from returning. The stigma that the girls feel in their communities after being freed, coupled with drug dependencies or threats from pimps, often lead them to return to the red-light district. It’s enormously dispiriting for well-meaning aid workers who oversee the brothel raid […] to only see the girls climb over the back wall…” (35). "We sympathized with the view that prohibition won’t work and better against prostitution today than it did against alcoholin America in the 1920s. Instead of trying fruitlessly to band prostitution…. It permits access to brothels so that they can more easily be checked for underage girls. Over time, we’vechanged our minds. That legalize-and-regulate model simply hasn’t worked very well in countries where prostitution is often coerced..." (25)."Sexual honor is a major reason for violence against women: The cult of virginity has been exceptionally widespread. Not only does the Bible advocate stoning girls to death when they fail to bleed on their wedding sheets, but Solon, the great lawgiver of ancient Athens, prescribed that no Athenian could be sold into slavery save a Confucian saying from the Song Dynasty declares: ‘For a woman to starve to death is a small matter, but for her to lose her chastity is a calamity’ (81).
David Ozda
David Guzman
Sherri Short
Amani Ali
Farhad Rahimi
English 1A
9-9:50
continuation of Block Quotes:
In the section of, ‘Is Islam Misogynistic?’, it questions the repression of women by stating that in 30 percent of Muslim countries, the women are oppressed and have no say so. In Half the Sky, it states that, “Some evidence suggests that where families repress women, governments end up repressing all citizens. The status of women, more than other factors that predominate in Western thinking about religious systems and politics, links Islam and the democracy deficit. That may be because an authoritarian and patriarchal home environment is mirrored in an authoritarian and political system” (159). To try and help this crisis, it would have to start with the government for the people to come together and fight for this to manifest.
The Authors, Nicholas D. Kristof and Sheryl WuDunn focus on women's issues around the globe, trying to bring to the readers attention the oppressive state some live in, from sex trafficking and forced prostitution to honor killings. “Rescuing girls from the brothel is the easy part, however. The challenge is keeping them from returning. The stigma that the girls feel in their communities after being freed, coupled with drug dependencies or threats from pimps, often lead them to return to the red-light district. It’s enormously dispiriting for well-meaning aid workers who oversee the brothel raid […] to only see the girls climb over the back wall…” (35). "We sympathized with the view that prohibition won’t work and better against prostitution today than it did against alcoholin America in the 1920s. Instead of trying fruitlessly to band prostitution…. It permits access to brothels so that they can more easily be checked for underage girls. Over time, we’vechanged our minds. That legalize-and-regulate model simply hasn’t worked very well in countries where prostitution is often coerced..." (25)."Sexual honor is a major reason for violence against women: The cult of virginity has been exceptionally widespread. Not only does the Bible advocate stoning girls to death when they fail to bleed on their wedding sheets, but Solon, the great lawgiver of ancient Athens, prescribed that no Athenian could be sold into slavery save a Confucian saying from the Song Dynasty declares: ‘For a woman to starve to death is a small matter, but for her to lose her chastity is a calamity’ (81).
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Audrey Topacio
Angelica Munoz
ANgela Vasquez
Shameiko Porter
Carolina Ramirez
Berta
ABraham
Paraphrased thesis: Authors Kristof and WuDUNN illustrate the reality of the deep rooted institution, interpersonal, and internalized oppression in the female population worldwide and the presence of liberating action in an effort to subside such immorality.
Once on the far balcony, the girls pounded on the window and woke the surprised tenant…The girls took the elevator down and wandered the silent streets until they found a police station and stepped inside…She thought a Malaysian policeman was escorting her home when he drove her to the Thai border—but then he sold her to a trafficker, who peddled her to a Thai brothel (Kristoff p xiii).
Honor killings are illegal in Iraqi Kurdistan, but security forces were present as Du'a was attacked, and they did not interfere. At least one thousand men joined in the assault...you can find a half-dozen versions of what happened next (82).
Ainul had herself been a prostitute when she was young, so she was unsympathetic to the younger girls. “If my own daughters can be prostituted, then you can be too,” Ainul would tell the girls. And it was true that she had prostituted her own two daughters. (They had to be beaten up to agree to it,” Meena explained. “No one wants to go into this” (Kristoff p 7).
The letter writers were mobilized by Equality Now, an advocacy organization based in New York that tackles abuses of women around the world. Its founder, Jessica Neuwirth…has kept Equality Now going with the support of guardian angels, including Gloria Steinem and Meryl Streep. Today, it has a staff of fifteen in New York, London, Nairobi, with an annual budget of $2 million—pocket change in the world of philanthropy(66).
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