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Thursday, September 01, 2011
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I have a Master's Degree from the University of San Francisco in Writing, and an undergraduate degree from Holy Names College in Humanistic Studies. I write a weekly column for a local newspaper, San Francisco Bay View. I also have an Internet Radio Show: Wanda's Picks http://wwww.blogtalkradio.com/wandas-picks
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Jonathan Swan
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11:00 – 11:50 AM
1 September 2011
Dyson didn’t leave that day with what he desired - “an interview with Snoop Dogg (Dyson 12)” – but he learned more than he intended. With more more of an understanding for Tupac’s complex life, with his different personas, the varieties of his interests, and the external influences that determined his life and career. Tupac is his generation’s representation. Tupac could portray a “hopefulness and a helplessness (Dyson 13)” that could define the hip-hop culture he immersed himself in, as well as the millions of kids that that idolized him. But with more time passing since his death, the image that people have of Tupac is becoming more steeped within the myths that surrounded his legacy. All of the themes that Dyson was made aware of on his warehouse visit are very important: Tupac’s pride as a black man, outspokenness, attention cravings, poetic skills, “thug image, (Dyson 13)” business endeavors, foreshadowing observations, place in pop culture, “his search for an authentic black experience, (Dyson 13)” loving messages to impoverished people in urban communities, his lost opportunities due to his death, his Elvis-like recognition, and the distraught his premature death caused. This book explores all of these themes in detail.
Sebastian Chastang
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50 am
1 September 2011
Plagiarism and Paraphrasing
1. One explanation for Tupac yet echoing in society is his huge literary passion.
Jennifer Coon
Professor Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50
1 September 2011
Free Write #2
Original: “Of course, those who admire Tupac don’t always understand him the first, second, or even third go-round.” Dyson 4
Even though Tupac’s listeners and fans didn’t understand him in the beginning, it took multiple times listening to his words to fully understand everything he was talking about.
Original: “But it’s not just the volume of Tupac’s work that makes him irresistible.” Dyson 5
Although the content of Tupac’s work was massive, it’s not just the fact that he wrote about it, it’s the fact that everything he was talking about was happening, and he went through a lot of it himself, firsthand experience.
Original: “The reason there’s so much to say about Tupac is that there are so many parts of Tupac to say something about.” Dyson 8
Tupac wasn’t just a rapper rapping about the same old thing all the time. He rapped about so many different problems in not only the “hood” but all over America.
Brianna DeGrano
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11:00-11:50AM
1 September 2011
Original:
“His language was inflamed with love for the desperately poor; Tupac was a ghetto Dickens who explained the plight of the downtrodden in rebellious rhyme.” (Dyson 2 of Intro)
Paraphrase:
Tupac’s diction displayed his passion for the impoverished; he was a modern-day Dickens who conveyed the troubles of the opressed in defiant poetry.
Original:
“One of the reasons Tupac still resonates in the culture is his outsized literary ambition.” (Dyson 2 of Intro)
Paraphrase:
Tupac remains and reappears in society because of his great literary goals.
Original:
“Perhaps it is Tupac’s ability to reach a broad audience within and beyond hip hop that separates him from most of his peers.” (Dyson 7 of Intro)
Paraphrase:
Maybe it is Tupac’s skill to get to a wide group of listeners in and further that hip hop that sets him aside from the majority of his peers.
Darrin Webster
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50AM
1 September 2011
Original:
"Like so many of the 'troublesome' artists who preceded him, it was Tupac's tolerance for lives gray ones that provided a constant problem for both his critics and those seeking to interpret his work."
- Dyson
Paraphrase:
Because Tupac's work kind of co-insides with the "gangster rap" stereo type as well as a social activist type stance , it makes it hard for listeners to classify it because of its contradictory nature.
original:
"While he often decried racism and spoke about blacks and whites, Tupac rarely thought in black and white terms. "
-Dyson
Paraphrase:
Although Tupac talked spoke on racism a lot , he almost never thought about it in terms of black and white.
original:
"His eager embrace of ethical ambivalence came off to his critics as as mere hypocrisy."
Praphrase:
His contradictory views on the subject of ethnicity passed him off as a hypocrite.
Melody Webster
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
1 September 2011
Plagiarism and Paraphrasing
1. Original : “After I recovered from his unanticipated sonic blast, my brow furrowed and my eyes slightly buckled, he continued, laughing at my response and the way the crowd momentarily froze.” (Dyson 1)
Paraphrased : After I recuperated from his unforeseen explosion, my brow deepened and my eyes faintly closed, he sustained, chuckling at my reaction and the way the crowd briefly stopped.
2. Original : “ I climbed the stairs of the converted warehouse that serves as the company’s headquarters and found the third-floor makeshift ‘green room’ where the artists and media would gather before the show.” (Dyson 2)
Paraphrased: I ascended the stairs of the transformed warehouse that performs as the company’s office and located the third-floor temporary “green room” where the artists and media would get together preceding the preformance.
Jesse Pinkney
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11:00AM-11:50AM
1 Sept 2011
(original)
One of the reasons Tupac still resonates in the culture is his outsized literary ambition. When it came to themes of music, Tupac thought big, and often stark binaries:
(Paraphrase)
Tupac is still recognized in the Hip Hop culture because of his literary ambition and play of words. Tupac used themes to paint a picture of his music for listeners, and often wrote about cause and effect.
(Original)
He fearlessly , and poetically, explored dimensions of the male psyche neglected by his rap peers. Tupac squeezed the various vulnerabilities of black life into verse without smothering it’s defiant hope.
(Paraphrase)
Tupac was a leader in the since that he wasn’t afraid to discuss and explore the livelihood of the male libido not talked about by his rap peers. Tupac candy coated the truth without the listener knowing they were being feed knowledge.
Sebastian Chastang
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50 am
1 September 2011
Plagiarism and Paraphrasing
Original: One of the reasons Tupac still resonates in the culture is his outsized literary ambition.
Literal Paraphrase: One explanation for Tupac yet echoing in society is his huge literary passion.
Lena Chhit
Wanda Sabir
English 1a 11am-1150am
1 September 2011
Literal Paraphrases from Dyson Introduction
1. Original: “Tupac read books because he was deeply curious about the world around him.”(Dyson 4)
Paraphrase: Tupac examined books for the reason that he was rofoundly inquisitive about the earth surrounding him.
2.Original: “Perhaps it is Tupac’s ability to reach a broad audience within and beyond hip hop that separates him from most of his peers.”(Dyson 7)
Paraphrase: Maybe it is Tupac’s capability to accomplish a wide range of listeners inside and outside of hip hop that differentiates him from most of his colleagues.
3.Original: “The reason there’s so much to say about Tupac is that there are so many parts of Tupac to say something about.”(Dyson 8)
Paraphrase: The cause to why there’s a large extent to speak regarding Tupac is that there are numerous parts of Tupac to speak about.
Javier Flores
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11:00AM-11:50AM
1st September 2011
Original:
“Tupac is one of the greatest poets out there right now,” Ray J told me. I took note of his present tense, since Tupac’s continually unfolding artistry, in books, in movies, and in compact disks, makes it difficult to speak of him in the past.(Dyson 3)
“The brother just went into the studio and did songs that a lot of people can relate to and learn from before he went out." (Dyson 3)
Paraphrase:
Tupac is one of the best poets around right now,” Ray J says to me. I noticed the present tense, since Tupac’s constant unraveling artistry, in literature, in cinema, and in music, makes it tricky to speak of him in the past.
The homie just went in the studio and created songs that many people can relate to and gain knowledge from before he went out.
Stephanie Kiick
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11:00-11:50AM
1 September 2011
Freewrite: Intoduction Paraphrasing
Original:
“He fearlessly, and poetically, explored dimensions of the male psyche neglected by his rap peers,” (Dyson 2).
Paraphrase:
He relentlessly, and … , investigated factors of the male soul, spirit, and mind ignored by his hip hop associates (Dyson 2).
Original:
“His eager embrace of ethical ambivalence came off to crtics as mere hypocrisy.” (Dyson 3).
Paraphrase:
His dedicated encompass of moralistic confusion presented itself to commentators as almost deciet.” (Dyson 3).
Joe Kempel
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
1 September 2011
Original: These pairings allow contemporary rap stars to associate themselves with Tupac’s enduring legacy even as they assure that Tupac’s canon is both classic and contemporary. (Dyson 8)
Paraphrase: These combinations allow current rap stars to affiliate themselves with Tupac’s ongoing legacy even as they affirm that Tupac’s story is both classic and current.
Original: He is a peerless ambassador of hip hop around the world. (Dyson 8)
Paraphrase: He is an unparalleled representative of hip hop around the world.
Original: For those folk, Tupac’s searing voice is a siren of sanity. (Dyson 9)
Paraphrase: For those people, Tupac’s scorching voice is an alarm of truth.
Janelle Martin
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50 AM
1 September 2011
Original:
“But what ultimately makes Tupac a legend is the way he made the music he made, and the way he made it easy for others- producers, DJs , and rappers- to make something of the poetry he left behind. Even that may not satisfactorily explain his enduring appeal. Perhaps it is because he spoke straight from the heart that we recognized that a troubled prophet had risen to articulate a truth that we couldn’t possibly live without. (Dyson 9).
Paraphrase:
What really establishes Tupac as a legend is the way that he made his music, the way that he made it effortless for others like producers, DJs , and other rappers to utilize the poems he wrote. Still, that may not accurately explain why he is still appealing and relevant. One reason might be because he spoke with words right out of his heart so we could realize that his purpose was to express a reality that everyone needed to understand.
Gabriel Rivera
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1a 11:00-11:50
1st September 2011
Original: “Tupac read booksbecause he was deeply curious about the world around him.” (Dyson 2)
Paraphrase: “Tupac, being very curious about the world, read many books.”
Original: “The feeling that they are brimming with knowledge dares Tupac’s audience to raise their game even more and to learn as much as they can.” (Dyson 5)
Paraphrase: “The notion that the lyrics are full of knowledge asks Tupac’s audience to elevate their game and grasp as much as they can.”
Original: “Of course, those who admire Tupac don’t always understand him the first, or second, or even third go-round. Many of them surely felt him before they grasped him.” (Dyson 4)
Paraphrase: “Usually, people who enjoy Tupac don’t always grasp his ideas the first, or second, or even third listen. A lot of people most likely felt him before they understood his ideas.”
Tori Coleman
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11:00-11:50
1 September 2011
Original:
“The more you learn, the more you get what Tupac is up to.” (Dyson 4)
Paraphrase:
The better educated you make yourself, the more you comprehend Tupac’s thought.
Original:
“That’s an inspiration to keep listening in order to keep hearing what Tupac keeps saying.” (Dyson 4)
Paraphrase:
That’s an insight to continue to comprehend in order to continue to take in what Tupac speaks of.
Original:
“It spurs repeat listeners to reveal in decoding esoteric allusions.” (Dyson 4)
Paraphrase:
It arouses previous spectators to tell in translating obscure thoughts.
Daniel Garagntilla
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50
1 September 2011
Original:
“ When he declared that George Bush’s fatally slow response to the victims of Hurricane Katrina proved he didn’t care about black people, Kanye accepted Tupac’s mantle of fearless truth telling.” (Dyson 7)
Paraphrased:
When Kanye West acknowledeged that George Bush’s seriously sluggish reaction to those who suffered from Hurricane Katrina confirmed he did not have any conscern for black citizenz, he established Tupac’s role of boldly speaking out.
Nina Pesco
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50am
1 September 2011
Free Write
Original #1
“As things stand, Tupac’s riveting art, and the riveting problems he rapped about, are all here to
stay.” (Dyson page 10)
Paraphrase #1
As time goes on, the issues Tupac mentions in his music are still things we face today.
Original #2
“Pac spoke of how the government found cash for war but not the economically strapped, a
claim often associated with the war in Iraq and the lack of response following the devastation
of Hurricane Katrina.” (Dyson page 7)
Paraphrase #2
Tupac was not shy in speaking about the problems surrounding people who were living in bad
neighborhoods.
Original #3
“But what ultimately makes Tupac a legend is the way he made the music he made, and the
way he made it easy for others-producers, DJ’s, and rappers-to make something of the poetry
he left behind” (Dyson page 9)
Paraphrase #3
Tupac was so popular because he made his music readily accessible to his fans.
Cesar Aguirre
Miss Wanda
English 1A
1 September, 2011
Original:
“Tupac read books because he was deeply curious about the world around him. He agreed with Socrates that an unexamined life isn’t worth living”
Paraphrase
The interest that Tupac had for knowing and understanding the world, lead him to agree with the great philosopher Socrates in the concept that life is not worth living without a purpose. (Dyson 4)
Darrin Webster
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50AM
1 September 2011
Original:
"Like so many of the 'troublesome' artists who preceded him, it was Tupac's tolerance for lives gray ones that provided a constant problem for both his critics and those seeking to interpret his work."
- Dyson 3
Paraphrase:
Because Tupac's work kind of co-insides with the "gangster rap" stereo type as well as a social activist type stance , it makes it hard for listeners to classify it because of its contradictory nature.
original:
"While he often decried racism and spoke about blacks and whites, Tupac rarely thought in black and white terms. "
- Dyson 3
Paraphrase:
Although Tupac talked spoke on racism a lot , he almost never thought about it in terms of black and white.
original:
"His eager embrace of ethical ambivalence came off to his critics as as mere hypocrisy."
- Dyson 3
Praphrase:
His contradictory views on the subject of ethnicity passed him off as a hypocrite.
Sean Newton
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
1 September 2011
Original Sentence : Like so many of the “troublesome” artists who preceded him, it was Tupac’s tolerance for life’s grey ones that provided a constant problem for both his critics and those seeking to interpret his work. (Dyson 3 Introduction )
Paraphrased : Like many of society’s “troubled” artists that came before him, Tupac’s understanding for society’s grey created constant issues and confusion among his critics and those trying to interpret his work.
Original Sentence : The vibrant imagination that fueled Tupac’s gift was often dismissed, perhaps because it was often dismissed, perhaps too dark, too dangerous. (Dyson 3 Introduction )
Paraphrased : The highly vibrant imagination that fueled Tupac’s abilities was often lost and forgotten, perhaps it was frequently ignored, maybe too scary, too treacherous.
Original Sentence : How could he proclaim peace while carrying a sword? (Dyson 3 Introduction )
Paraphrased : How could he praise pacification while holding a sword?
Marcel Rollock
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11:00-11:50AM
1 September 2011
Literal Paraphrase
Original:
“He fearlessly, and poetically, explored dimensions of the male psyche neglected by his peers. (None of them had before dared to as tenderly, or publicly, praise his mother as Tupac did in “Dear Mama.”) Tupac squeezed the various vulnerabilities of black life into verse without smothering its defiant hope.”
(Dyson 2)
Paraphrase:
He courageously, and lyrically, delved in to dimensions of the male ego disregarded by his peers. (No one had before tried to as delicately, or openly, celebrate his mother as Tupac did in “Dear Mama.”) Tupac put pressure on the assorted burdens of African American existence into song without suffocating its bold ambition.
Quincy Taylor
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50am
1 September 2011
Original:
“Of course those who admire Tupac don’t always understand him the first, or second, or the third go-round.”
(Dyson 3 of Introduction)
Paraphrase:
Of course for those who admire Tupac don’t always empathize him the first, second, or even the third go-round.
Original:
“His language was inflamed with love for the desperately poor; Tupac was a ghetto Dickens who explained the plight of the downtrodden in rebellious rhyme.”
(Dyson 1 of Introduction)
Paraphrase:
His language was decorated with love for the desperately poor; Tupac was a ghetto that clarified the plight of the downtrodden in rebellious rhyme.
Original:
“Like so many “troublesome” artists who proceeded him, it was Tupac’s tolerance for life’s grey ones that provided a constant problem for both his critics and those seeking to interpret his work.”
(Dyson 2 of Introduction)
Paraphrase:
Like so many “troublesome” artists who proceeded him, it was Tupac’s tolerance for life’s dull ones that provided a constant problem for both his critics and those who were attempting to interpret his work
Quincy Taylor
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 11-11:50am
1 September 2011
Original:
“Of course those who admire Tupac don’t always understand him the first, or second, or the third go-round.”
(Dyson 3 of Introduction)
Paraphrase:
Of course for those who admire Tupac don’t always empathize him the first, second, or even the third go-round.
Original:
“His language was inflamed with love for the desperately poor; Tupac was a ghetto Dickens who explained the plight of the downtrodden in rebellious rhyme.”
(Dyson 1 of Introduction)
Paraphrase:
His language was decorated with love for the desperately poor; Tupac was a ghetto that clarified the plight of the downtrodden in rebellious rhyme.
Original:
“Like so many “troublesome” artists who proceeded him, it was Tupac’s tolerance for life’s grey ones that provided a constant problem for both his critics and those seeking to interpret his work.”
(Dyson 2 of Introduction)
Paraphrase:
Like so many “troublesome” artists who proceeded him, it was Tupac’s tolerance for life’s dull ones that provided a constant problem for both his critics and those who were attempting to interpret his work
Kyle Tay
Professor wanda Sabir
English 1A 11am - 11:50am
1 September 2011
Literally Paraphrasing Dyson's Intro
Original:
This past March I made my way to the warehouse district of Los Angeles on a warm Sunday afternoon in hopes of talking to Snoop Dogg about his late friend and sometime collaborated Tupac Shakur (Dyson 1).
Literal Paraphrase:
This last March I found my direction to downtown Los Angeles on a hot mid-day weekend wishing to speak to Snoop Dogg about his old pal and occasional co-worker Tupac Shakur.
Original:
Our impromptu session over, I scanned the room for other folk that might have known the rapper (Dyson 2).
Literal Paraphrase:
Our unorganized meeting ended, I examined the surroundings for other people that possibly knew the hip-hop artist.
Original:
Moreover, I had done enough reading and writing about hip-hop, enough attending concerts and shows and club promotions to know that nothing offends the machismo of the rapper more than male groupies. (Dyson 7)
Literal Paraphrase:
Besides, I already did a sufficient job in reviewing rap, a lot of going to shows and performances and bar promotions to understand that there isn’t a thing that hurts the masculine pride of the artist further than non-female followers.
Marena Perez
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
1 September 2011
“Perhaps it is Tupac’s ability to reach a broad audience within and beyond hip hop that separates him from most of his peers.” (Dyson Intro 7)
Tupac is certainly divided from his fellow artists and maybe what justifies such singularity was his skill at affecting other listeners not apart of the hip hop culture.
“But what ultimately makes Tupac a legend is the way he made the music he made, and the way he made it easy for others-producers, Djs, and rappers-to make something of the poetry left behind” (Dyson Intro 9)
In the end it is Tupacs technique of making music and the simplicity of allowing other producers and artists to collaborate with his poetry after his death that makes him the marvel he is today.
“The reason there’s so much to say about Tupac is that there are so many parts of Tupac to say something about. His raps are endlessly recombinant; mix tapes, bootlegs, and a seemingly unquenchable flow of new configurations of Tupac’s lyrics testify to his seminal soulfulness.” (Dyson Intro 8)
To explain why there is so much to overview on Tupac is because there are various parts of him to mention and deliberate on. His flows are continuously generating new and unrelenting material that validates his crucial and poetic tenderness.
Edwin Peabody
Professor Sabir
English 1A 11-1150
1 September 2011
1 Dyson) Perhaps it is Tupacs ability to reach a broad audience with in and beyond hip-hop that separates him from most of his peer.
2 Dyson) Tupac is the consummate all –purpose rapper; he appeals to backpackers and thugs, to the roughnecks the ladies, and those who like to party and those who hunger for political relevance.
3 Dyson) Only kanye west has even begun to attract such competing constituencies within hip-hop.
Literal peraprase:
1) Tupacs had the ability to attract a diverse audience within and beyond hip-hop that distinguishes him from most of his peers.
2) Tupac is an all around great rapper; he appeals to students and gangsters, to the toughest men and women and to those who like to party and those who seek political education.
3) Only Kanye West has addressed how the government doesn’t care about black people in his music.
Estrellita Andrea Serrano
Wanda Sabir
English 1A
September 1, 2011
1. “It’s really weird how a person can predict things the way he did. When he passed away, everything he had talked about before he died actually happened.” Page 4 introduction to Holler if you hear me. Dyson
It is strange how a man can foresee things the way he did. After his passing, all his predictions came true.
2. Tupac is perhaps the representative figure of his generation. Page 13 introduction to Holler if you hear me. Dyson
Some would say Tupac may be the face of his age group.
3. Tupac Amaru Shakur is one of the most important and contradictory artist to have spoken in and to our culture. Page 17 introduction to Holler if you hear me. Dyson
Not only was Tupac Amaru Shakur rebellious, he was also an influential emcee to his supporters.
Estrellita Andrea Serrano
Wanda Sabir
English 1A
September 1, 2011
1. “It’s really weird how a person can predict things the way he did. When he passed away, everything he had talked about before he died actually happened.” Page 4 introduction to Holler if you hear me. Dyson
It is strange how a man can foresee things the way he did. After his passing, all his predictions came true.
2. Tupac is perhaps the representative figure of his generation. Page 13 introduction to Holler if you hear me. Dyson
Some would say Tupac may be the face of his age group.
3. Tupac Amaru Shakur is one of the most important and contradictory artist to have spoken in and to our culture. Page 17 introduction to Holler if you hear me. Dyson
Not only was Tupac Amaru Shakur rebellious, he was also an influential emcee to his supporters.
Debanique kemp
Professor sabir
English 1A 11-11:50
15 September 2011
Plagiarism and Paraphrasing
Original:
A full decade after his death, Tupac Shakur has the culture in a headlock.
Paraphrase:
It has been ten years since the death of hip hop legend, Tupac Shakur and his work still emulates culture today.
Original:
One of the reasons Tupac still resonates in the culture is his outsized literary ambition.
Paraphrase:
Tupac’s was a visionary, His wisdom and desire for success is the reason his work still reflects and relates to a lot of the issues in society today.
Original:
Tupac read books because he was deeply curious about the world around him.
Paraphrase:
Tupac had an inquiring mind; he read books to obtain knowledge about the world around him.
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