Today in class we practiced citing using: a block quote, a short in-text citation and a free paraphrase.
Post the work here. It will lose its formatting (smile).
Homework is to complete the book. Tomorrow we will continue practicing citing using introductory remarks to give the citation context. Students can use the same arguments used today.
As I wandered through the class and read student work, I noticed that some citations had nothing to do directly with the signal phrase. The signal phrase gives readers the back story and lets us know what is coming.
The way one knows when to use a quote is when the writer says it a lot better than we could say it. A good citation is a powerful tool in writing.
For those who have Hacker look at the section: Research Guide: 50b Keep track of source materials (5th Edition 397), 50c Summarizing without plagiarizing (398-400), 52 Avoiding plagiarizing (402), 52a Cite quotations and borrowed ideas. (403-404), 52b Enclose borrowed language in quotation marks (404), 52c Put summaries and paraphrases in your own words (405), 53 Integrating Sources (406-413); 54 Documenting Sources (413-422).
Look at exercises at: dianahacker.com/rules and click on: Electronic Research Exercises -- E-ex 54-1 through 54-3 (422)
Post the work here. It will lose its formatting (smile).
Homework is to complete the book. Tomorrow we will continue practicing citing using introductory remarks to give the citation context. Students can use the same arguments used today.
As I wandered through the class and read student work, I noticed that some citations had nothing to do directly with the signal phrase. The signal phrase gives readers the back story and lets us know what is coming.
The way one knows when to use a quote is when the writer says it a lot better than we could say it. A good citation is a powerful tool in writing.
For those who have Hacker look at the section: Research Guide: 50b Keep track of source materials (5th Edition 397), 50c Summarizing without plagiarizing (398-400), 52 Avoiding plagiarizing (402), 52a Cite quotations and borrowed ideas. (403-404), 52b Enclose borrowed language in quotation marks (404), 52c Put summaries and paraphrases in your own words (405), 53 Integrating Sources (406-413); 54 Documenting Sources (413-422).
Look at exercises at: dianahacker.com/rules and click on: Electronic Research Exercises -- E-ex 54-1 through 54-3 (422)
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Analise Bostrom
Samantha Swain
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
2-13-12
3 Citations
Argument: Leymah is a brave woman.
Block Quote:
Leymah is a brave woman because she is willing to do whatever it takes to fight for her cause. When the peace talks were not going anywhere the women decided to hold the peace delegates hostage until they accomplished something. Officials threatened to arrest Leymah, but then she threatened to strip naked!
“Okay, if you think you’ll humiliate me with an arrest, watch me humiliate myself more than you could have dreamed. I was beside myself, desperate. Every institution that I’d been taught was there to protect the people had proved evil and corrupt; everything I valued had collapsed. These negotiations had been my last hope, but they were crashing, too.” (Leymah Gbowee, 161)
It is an African belief that to see a married or elderly woman deliberately bare herself, a terrible curse will fall on you. Leymah knows this, and no matter how humiliating it is she will do it to protect her values.
Short Citation:
Leymah is a brave woman because she stands up to Charles Taylor. The woman of WIPNET knew that the best way to stop the war is to contact the man in charge of it: President Charles Taylor. After weeks of demanding to speak with him, he finally gives her a chance. “…a feeling of anxiety, even panic, swept over us. We were going to meet the monster.” (Gbowee, 140) She knows who she’s up against, and she does not deny her fear. But rather, she embraces it. And she speaks her mind.
Free Paraphrase:
Leymah is a brave woman because she knows what it means to be a good leader, and she does whatever it takes. After a close family friend dies, her father falls into a deep depression and a state of hopelessness. It is Leymah who takes charge and makes sure he is ready for the funeral. “…my role as leader required me to hold back my own feelings.” (195) She knows that to be a leader means to suppress her own emotions and take care of the people around her.
Argument: Leymah is a brave woman.
Block Quote:
Leymah is a brave woman because she is willing to do whatever it takes to fight for her cause. When the [Liberian] peace talks were not going anywhere the women decided to hold the peace delegates hostage until they accomplished something. Officials threatened to arrest Leymah, but then she threatened to strip naked!
[Leymah says to the soldiers and to the president's men:] [Do not use quotations marks.]“Okay, if you think you’ll humiliate me with an arrest, watch me humiliate myself more than you could have dreamed. [She says she]was beside [herself], desperate. Every institution that [she'd]been taught was there to protect the people had proved evil and corrupt; everything [she] valued had collapsed. These negotiations had been [her] last hope, but they were crashing, too.” [Leymah Gbowee--delete, you already mention her name above. Also do not use punctuation] (161)
It is an African belief that to see a married or elderly woman deliberately bare herself, a terrible curse will fall on you. Leymah knows this, and no matter how humiliating it is she will do it to protect her values. (Page number?) Put the punctuation outside the parenthetical.
Short Citation:
Leymah is a brave woman because she stands up to Charles Taylor. The woman of WIPNET knew that the best way to stop the war is to contact the man in charge of it: President Charles Taylor. After weeks of demanding to speak with him, he finally gives her a chance. [Who's speaking? Introduce the quote] “…a feeling of anxiety, even panic, swept over us. We were going to meet the monster.” (Gbowee, 140--see Hacker) She knows who she’s up against, and she does not deny her fear. But rather, she embraces it. And she speaks her mind.
Free Paraphrase:
Leymah is a brave woman because she knows what it means to be a good leader, and she does whatever it takes. After a close family friend dies, her father falls into a deep depression and a state of hopelessness. It is Leymah who takes charge and makes sure he is ready for the funeral. [Why do you add a citation to the paraphrase? Delete this and just use your explanation below] “…my role as leader required me to hold back my own feelings.” (195) She knows that to be a leader means to suppress her own emotions and take care of the people around her.
Good work! Bring Hacker to class tomorrow.
Colleen Low
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A.
13 February 2012
Argument, Paraphase, Cite, Block quote to “Mighty”
Miss Sabir I double spaced and indented 10 spaces, but it didn't show
The women in Liberia are strong, however lack the power to express themselves. Throughout the book, “Might Be Our Powers,” we recognize the powerlessness, to which the women felt trapped with their silent discontent. As Leymah leads the workshops for the Trauma Healing Center, she discovers that the women participants were tentative about expressing their personal issues, especially when men were present. Leymah offers a project to the women to clean their community, which is taking action over the issues that they are dissatisfied with, and in turn, the women voiced how they felt such a satisfaction. After further sessions, many women were eager to expel their afflictions to Leymah and she begins a women’s forum just to talk. She recognizes the importance of being able to express amongst other women, who also felt the burden of their culture and life. It is paradox, to which women are so strong, however lack the empowerment to speak and Lemah expounds, “We hold it all because we need to be strong, and complaining-or even sharing-is a sign of weakness. (107). During these precious talks, Lelymah truly see the healing attributes of communication and remarks,
I expected to hear about the war. But as would happen again and again in the future, the stories the women needed to share that night started long before the fighting did. The first to speak told us about her husband, whose unending demand for sex had burdened her with too may children. The head of port security confessed that she’d never believed she had any value as a person. A mother of four talked about an abusive marriage that she’d entered in her teens. Each speaker wept with relief when she finished; each spoke the same words: “This is the first time I ever told this story.” (105).
Leymah offers the process of powerful expression to the women in her community, so that they may see the commonalities of their feelings of their situations, which will give them strength to take action within themselves and to better their lives and their environment.
Destiny Williams
John Sills
Kennedy Alston
Whitney Maxwell
Nezha Abdeirahman
Jaron Terrell
Hoan Vu
Professor Wanda Sabir
English1A
13February2012
Argument: Leymah draws most of her strength from people around her.
Block Quote
"When you're depressed you get trapped inside yourself and lose energy to take the actions that might make you feel better. you hate yourself for that. You see the suffering of others but feel incapable of helping them, and that makes you hate yourself too. The hate makes you sadder, the sadness makes you more helpless, the helplessness fill you with more self hate. Working at the THRP broke that cycle for me. I wasn't sitting home thinking endlessly about what a failureI was. I was doing something, something that ctually helped people.
Short Citation
"When i spoke to a group of women I could control what happened. I became someone else powerful and sure.
Free Phrase
Leymah's old friend Jill, a social worker living in Chicago was more than just a supportive friend; Jill was an emotional relief during Leymah's turbulent life.
Ana Vasquez
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
February 13, 2012
Argument: Leymah give power a meaning.
Block Quote: Leymah throughout the whole memoir demonstrates us to be a powerful women, she has been abused by her husband, and has been humiliated by people. She had to do everything by herself. Single parenting and make decisions for herself.
“My arrival in Accra was an emotional experience. I’d come to this city twice before, both times by sea, sick and poor. Now a jet brought me, and took a car to a nice hotel. When I, walked into the lobby it was unreal. Was I really here? Was it really me?” (Leymah Gbowee, pg.101)
It is known that Leymah was an African American that had many struggles and was convinced to achieve what she mostly wanted, which was to get out the life she was living and become a successful women. Not just a women at home who kept getting pregnant, and had nothing to offer her children.
Short Citation: Leymah gave the word Power meaning, but telling us the meaning of a women, and all the capactites a women have. She has taught us, that even when a women is at her worst, she can still pick herself up and start over, or simply pick up where she ended at. “ Women are like sponges. We take it in- the trauma of separated families, the death of loved ones.”(Gbowee pg. 106) Women have the ability to absorb any situation. Even at there weak points and moments, they still take the pain.
Free Paraphrase: Leymah is a women of power, who had the strength to get out the life she was living. She was agood leader, and knew what she was doing, and would strive for her goal
Allison
Courtney
De’Janae
Kathleen
Mark
Kathleen Adams
Professor Sabir
English 1A
13 February 2012
Mighty Be Our Powers
Citation:
After reading about Leymah, I wanted to reach out and let her know that everything would be alright. She was brave and strong yet weak, with everything she had been through thus far, my heart and soul wept for her. Then, a woman appears from her private room in the hospital, and confronts Leymah in a tone that may be harsh, although necessary to snap Leymah out of her worthless feeling. “Shut up, she said. “Stop your crying. You can’t give up. You may not have anything, but you can read and write. You can educate your children.” What a powerful statement!
Ngoc Huynh
February 13, 2012
Write 1 block quote
1 short citation
1 free participation
Argument : In the African culture, it is widely accepted that men have more power over the women. Leymah is a great example who seeks for safety from the world in a man, which in this case, the man is Daniel.
In Mighty Be Our Powers, Leymah is one example of a women who seeks for safety from the world in a man, which in Leymah’s case, the man is Daniel. Before anything got worst, Daniel was a gentlemen that had a good paying job. He spent a lot on Leymah, he would pay for bills, gifts and food. She even described how sex was very intense and passionate.(pg.42) Then one day Leymah was with a friend of hers, that happened to be a man, Daniel found out and he hit her. After this happened, she wanted to end the relationship with Daniel, but she found out that she was pregnant. Leymah “would later learn about domestic violence, pregnancy never solves anything and more often, it makes things worse.Now that” Leymah “was ‘his’, Daniel’s need for control tightened.” (Pg 44) A women will blindly trust a man to provide for and protect their family,including herself, thinking that she will be taken care of for the rest of her life, even if it means that she gives up all her power to him.
When Leymah decided to stay with Daniel because she didn’t want her children to grow up without a father, it was hard to for her to have any say in anything. There were times where Daniel took her against her will, however this wasn’t the kind of experience she had with him before. She had forfeited her freedom when she wanted him to provide for the necessities for the family. Leymah says,
If we needed food, we had to wait for him to come home from work so we could shop together. A moment of rebellion, and now I was caught. It was hare to explain. You start with fantastic sex; you give another person that power over your body, then gradually you give him other powers, too. Pg 44 Leymah Gbowee
These powers, that women have given up and no longer have control of, becomes a man’s upperhand. It is a decision to set a commitment to be with a man, women will hold to their commitment until the man decides to leave. When Leymah first met Daniel, he had a wife and everyone knew “he’d abandoned his wife for this ‘helper’, and we never saw him again.” (pg 41)
Judging by Leymah’s relationship with Daniel, women will give their husbands a lot of power.
Stephen Yang
Professor Sabir
English 1A
13 February 2012
Might Citations
Block quote:
As a mother, Leymah is both caring and misunderstood with her children. Just like with her own mother, she shows love in a different way. Leymah has to provide for both her family and her children, but at the cost of time.
[Indent 1" for lines] "My thorns were my inability to care for four children properly, but my crowns was those children, their love. Once you realize that, you don't look at your life in the same way anymore." (Leymah Gbowee, 117)
Leymah shares with a group of women her own strength and weakness. Her weakness is being afraid for not being there for her children, but her strength is those same children that keeps her going everyday.
Source citation:
After Geneva, Leymah's sister, passes away during her visit back home, Leymah is confused and frighten when she realizes that she didn't really appreciate the little things that her sister did for her and her children. Leymah tells herself, "It was all the little things that Geneva had known and I didn't that frightened me. Having to guess who drank milk and who liked juice. Who sat where at the table. 'You don't know anything about us!' my children said." (193) Leymah knows that Geneva was the center of their world, but she didn't really know how much she affected the daily lives of the children.
Free paraphrase:
Leymah is a caring, loving mother who actually really loves her children and respects them for who they are. "All my children have their dreams, but none of them wants to do the kind of work I do. It hurts, but I understand. My work has given me a lot, but it has also cost us dearly." (227) She is unable to be their for her children during their childhood because she has to care for them in a different way and that is why she tries her hardest.
Flora Diamond
Susan Kelly
Jovita Weschler
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
13 February 2012
Argument: Jealousy can exist in sisterhood
Block, Cite, and Paraphrasing quotes
Leymah Gbowee, the heroine of the powerful memoir, Mighty Be Our Powers, suffers and overcomes the brutalities of war in her country, Liberia. Mighty tells us the story of a woman who came from relative wealth in her country Liberia, to living near emaciated poverty. Then rise up again and start a women's peace movement, making many personal sacrifices along the way, including not raising her children for periods of time.
As the leader in the women's peace protests in Liberia, Leymah was often under scrutiny from the media, opposing forces such as Rebel leaders and Charles Taylor, and even her own sister's. After awhile of slow to no progress, the women would begin to blame each other and Leymah for their problems and frustration.
“We formed a circle - and one by one the women i’d considered allies and friends attacked me: I was undermining them, I was still trying to run things, I had stolen money, I had taken credit for everything WIPNET had done while ‘not doing shit’ and all I’d ever wanted was power.” Women form the Mass Action and Gbowee (p.199)
We heavily suspect that these false accusations of fraud and exploitation happened more often than was encouraged. “‘This has always been all about you!’ one of the other women screamed at me after we disagreed one night. ‘You love the attention!’ You were nobody before this!’” (p.146)
We understand the pain it is to go through, to fight for something so hard, for so long then be slapped in the face by jealousy and the thing you love most. It is imagined to be like being asked to do something, then being yelled at for doing it. Thankfully, Leymah spoke to the American feminist, Gloria Steinem, whom smoothed away her anxiety she felt while she was being pressured by her sister Liberians. Gloria spoke of a 'pull her down' syndrome, which is a type of confrontation that happens when groups of women are together for a long period of time, who happen to be in poverty. Often the well to do women is attacked, our of jealousy. Gbowee(p.199)
Allison
De'janae
Cortney
Mark
Kathleen
De'janae Bates
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
13 February 2012
Block quote:
Leymah expressed vunerability when she was going into labor with her third child.
Daniel drove me to the hospital and told me he'd wait outside the delivery room, but after birth, he was nowhere to be found. When the nurses said I needed to pay extra for Arthur to have a special treatment, like an incubator, I did'nt have it. Niether Daniel nor I had money for a cell phone and there was no phone line at Old Ma's house. I had no way to reach him. I wanted to go home, but it's shameful fact that in Africa, if you haven't paid your bills, many hospitals literally hold you and won't let you leave.
At this point of time Leymah felt worthless because her husband had abandoned her at the hospital and this of course was an embrassing moment for her because she could not leave unless her hospital bill was paid.
(Gbowee page 63)
I was given a blanket and told to wait in the hall. I stood for a while, then sat on the floor. Night came. It felt cold. I had nothing for Arthur, not even diapers. I could feel his tiny body shivering. I wrapped him in my lappaand held him close, next to my skin. (Gbowee page 63)
Citation:
Leymah was at her breaking point,and then a lady approached her with words of encouragement that may have insulting but it was needed to make her strong rather than weak.
"Shut up," she said.. Stop your crying. You can't give up. You may not have anything, but you can still read and write. You can educate your children"
Paraphase:
Leymah had lost confidence within herself she felt degraded with herself and didn't believe she had let herself fall apart like she did was even possible because she had accomplished so much and it all had been going down the drain.
Daniel Escudero-Whitney
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
14 February 2012
Block quote
Leymah Gbowee believed that pregnancy would stop domestic violence. However, once she became pregnant, she found that it actually had the reverse effect:
As [Leymah] would later learn about domestic violence, pregnancy never solves anything, and more often, it makes things worse. Now that I was 'his', Daniel's need for control tightened.
(Gbowee 44)
Free paraphrase
_Leymah Gbowee_ illustrates how pregnancy does not stop domestic violence. Contrary to what one may believe, pregnancy worsens the violence. When her lover, Daniel, got her pregnant, his need for control over her tightened.
Short citation
Leymah Gbowee asserts that, "pregnancy never solves anything," in regard to domestic violence. She maintains that, in fact, "more often, it makes things worse" (44).
Abel Abyu
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
27 February 2012
Block Quotation:
Because of the war many were displaced as Leymah and her family. This led to scarce resources, strife and sometimes agressive rearing, sadly due to hunger.
[Indentation] One afternoon, Daniel's sister complained again that Nuku was standing for food- staring at her longingly while she ate. I lost control and I [Leymah] hit him. (pg. 67, Ch.5)
Short in-text citation:
Despite Charles Taylor's destruction upon Liberia and its inhabitants, the citizens believed electing him (giving him what he wanted to begin with, power) would benefit them because maybe then he would rebuild the city he ransacked for capture. "He killed my ma, he killed my pa," chanted his supporters. "But I will vote for him." The Liberian people weren't crazy, just exhausted to the soul. Taylor had destroyed the country, so let him put it back together. (Gbowee, pg.70)
Free Paraphrase:
"...I had nothing to say. I had no plan at all. Look what I had done with my life. I had seen at the start that Daniel was bad news, but I'd gone ahead anyway. (pg. 70)
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