SPHE Essay 1
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Homework:
Continue in SPHE pp. 53-85. Do all the exercises. Bring in a paper copy of your essay Monday, Sept. 14, 2009.
Begin reading Chapter 1: Dear Mama. We will break into Literature Circles Monday also for discussion.
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Homework:
Continue in SPHE pp. 53-85. Do all the exercises. Bring in a paper copy of your essay Monday, Sept. 14, 2009.
Begin reading Chapter 1: Dear Mama. We will break into Literature Circles Monday also for discussion.
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Katherine Atkinson
Professor Sabir
English 1A
10 September 2009
Teaching the Tire Slasher
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a word group containing a subject and a verb. The two types of clauses are independent and subordinate. An independent clause can function alone as a complete sentence, while a subordinate clause cannot. A phrase is a group of words that do not contain both a subject and a verb. Three common sentence errors are the comma-splice, the run-on sentence, and the fragment. A fragment is a clause or subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. A run-on sentence is a word group containing two or more independent clauses without proper punctuation separating them. A comma splice is a type of sentence error that consists of two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” because he makes many punctuation errors.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes, “Skating rules and I rock.” The mistake occurs between the words “rules” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses, “Skating rules” and “I rock,” joined together with a coordinating conjunction. He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. He can add a comma after the first independent clause or replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period.
Pidd makes a sentence fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate,” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “If.”
Pidd makes a sentence fragment error. He writes, “I don’t like Coach T’s teaching methods. His little step-by-step system for learning.” The mistake occurs between the words “methods” and “his.” Pidd punctuates the phrase “His little teaching methods” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence or by converting it into a sentence. To connect the Phrase Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. He can convert the phrase by making the phrase a subject and adding a predicate.
Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of searching for arrowheads with which to slash Coach T’s tires, Pidd should take the time to punctuate his essay correctly.
Bettie Nguyen (Tram Nguyen)
Professor Sabir
English 1A
September 10, 2009
Correcting the Drama Queen
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing both a subject and a verb. The two types of clauses are independent and subordinate. Independent clauses can stand alone; subordinate clauses functions as modifiers and cannot stand alone. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. Three common sentence errors are the fragment, the run-on sentence and the comma splice. A fragment is a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. A run-on sentence is a word group containing two independent clauses without the proper punctuation separating them. The comma splice is an error that consists of two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” because he makes many sentence punctuation errors.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “When he canters out to his Corvette. He needs to look out.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “When he canters out” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “when.”
Pidd makes a run-on error. He writes, “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the two clauses he can replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period, and he can also add a comma after the first independent clause.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes, “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “on” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses, “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “I deserve at least a C,” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. He can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma, or he can replace the comma with a semicolon or period. To subordinate one of the clauses Pidd must add a subordinating conjunction to it.
Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of complaining about Coach T’s teaching methods, Pidd should learn how to punctuate sentences correctly.
Howard He
English 1A
Professor Sabir
September 10, 2009
Stewart Starts Learning
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. First a clause is a group of words that contain a subject and a verb. There are 2 kinds of clauses; an independent clause and a subordinate clause. An independent clause can stand alone as a sentence but a subordinate clause use subordinating conjunctions and are modifiers to independent clauses. A phrase is unlike a clause because it does not contain subjects or verbs. The three common sentence punctuation errors are; comma splices, run-on, and fragment. A comma splice is an error that occurs when 2 or more independent clauses are only separated by a comma. A run-on is 2 or more independent clauses joined together without any punctuation. Finally, a fragment is a subordinate clause that is punctuated with only a period and is not a complete sentence itself. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his essay, “Skating Rules” because he has multiple grammar mistakes throughout his paper.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes, “Skating rules and I rock.” The mistake occurs between the words “rules” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate 2 independent clauses. “Skating rules” and “I rock,” joined together with a coordinating conjunction. He can fix this error by separating the 2 independent clauses. He can add a comma after the first independent clause or replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinating clause or connect it with a comma. He can convert the subordinating clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “If.”
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “His little step by step system for learning.” Pidd punctuates the phrase “His little step by step system for learning as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a sentence or by converting it into a independent clause. To connect the phrase Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. He must make the phrase have a subject and add a predicate.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “When he canters out to his Corvette.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “When he canters out to his Corvette.” With only a period he can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinating clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate 2 independent clauses, “I found this sick arrowhead” and “I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” Eh can fix this error by separating the 2 independent clauses. To separate the 2 clauses he can either replace or coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or period, or he can add a comma after the first independent clause.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “On” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated 2 independent clauses “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “I deserve at least a C,” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. He can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma or he can replace the comma with a semicolon or period.
Finally, the reason why Pidd does not deserve a passing grade is because of his incorrect use of grammar punctuations. Instead of complaining about the teacher, he should have studied better of sentence punctuations.
Angela Dennis
English 1A
Profssor Sabir
12 September 2009
Pidd Needs Step-by-Step
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certin rules and concepts. The first concept is clause- a group or words that contain a subject and a verb. There are two types of clauses. Independent and subordinate. A independent clause can function as a complete sentence; subordinate clause containing a subordinating conjunction ant if function as a modifer to an independent clause. A grouy of words that do not contain both a subject and a verb is a phrase. The three common sentence punctuation errors are comma splice, run-on sentences and fragments. A comma splice is a punctuation error consisting two or more independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. A run-on sentence joins two or more independent clauses without puntuation. There are two types of fragments, subordinate and phrases. Stewart Pidd deserves a "D" on his "Skating Rules" paper because he makes many sentence punctaution errors.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, " I don't like coach T's teaching methods. His little step-by-step system for learning." the mistake occurs between the words "methods" and "his." He puncuates the subordinate clause "His little step-by-step system for learning" with only a period. Pidd can correct the phrase by connecting it to the previous sentence or converting it into a sentence. To connect the fragment Pidd must remove the period after "methods" and add a comma before "his". To make a new clause Pidd must add a predicate.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes, " I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires." Pidds mistake occurs between the words "arrowhead" and "and." to fix his error Pidd can seperate the two independent clauses by replacing the cordinating conjunction "and" with a semicolon or he can add a comma after the first independent clause. Pidd can also replace the conjunction with a period.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes, "I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C." Pidd puncuates the two independent clauses "I do have a lot of drama going on" and "I deserve at least a C" with only a comma. He can fix the error by seperating the two independent clauses or subordinating one of them. To seperate the clause Pidd must either add a coordinating conjunction after the comma, replace the comma with a semicolon, or replacing the comma with a period.to subordinate one of the clauses Pidd must add a subordinating conjunction to it.
Stewart's failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of plotting to flat Coach T's tires, Pidd should skate to an english.
Emmy Sanchez
Professor Sabir
English 1A
SPHE essay 1
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing both a subject and a verb. Two types of clauses are independent and subordinate. An independent clause can stand alone, and a subordinate clause is a modifier to an independent clause. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. Three common sentence punctuation errors are comma splice, run-on sentence, and fragments. A subordinate clause is punctuated as a sentence. Stewart Pidd desevres a "D" on his paper "Skating Rules" due to the fact he was unable to properly punctuate his essay.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes, “Skating rules and I rock.” The mistake occurs between the words “rules” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses, “Skating rules” and “I rock,” joined together with a coordinating conjunction. He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. He can add a comma after the first independent clause or replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinating clause or connect it with a comma. He can convert the subordinating clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “If.”
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “His little step by step system for learning.” Pidd punctuates the phrase “His little step by step system for learning" as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a sentence or by converting it into a independent clause. To connect the phrase Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. To convert the phrase Pidd must add a predicate and make the phrase a subject.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “When he canters out to his Corvette.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “When he canters out to his Corvette.” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinating clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence
error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses, “I found this sick arrowhead” and “I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the two clauses he can add a comma after the first clause, or he can replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or period.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “On” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “I deserve at least a C,” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. He can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma or replace the comma with a semicolon or period. To subordinate one of the clauses Pidd must add a subordinating conjunction to it.
Pidd's failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of complaining about how much he hates english, Pidd should have learned how to properly punctuate his essay.
In order to punctuate sentences correctly the writers must understand the rules and concepts of writing. A clause is a group of words containing a subject and a verb. The two types of clauses are independent and subordinate clauses. An independent clause can stand alone as a complete sentence, while a dependent clause needs a subordinate to help it stand as a complete sentence. A phrase is a group of words that do not contain a subject or a verb. There are three common sentence errors and they are a run-on sentence, a comma splice and a fragment. A run-on sentence consists of two independent clauses without the correct punctuation. A comma splice is a sentence that is only punctuated with a comma. A fragment is a sentence that is missing a verb or subject. As I read the essay I found way too many errors and that's why I think Stewart deserves a "D" not a passing grade.
The first error was a run-on sentence. This happens between skating rules and I rock. Besides having a bad sentence structure he is sounding pretty cocky to me about his skating skills. This sentence seems to have nothing to do with the rest of the essay.
The second error that Stewart makes is between these two sentences “If I skate. I win”. These are both independent clauses. The way I would fix it is by the taking away the period from the first independent clause and put a comma there so the two sentences become one. You should always combine the two sentences that go together, because it makes your writing look better.
The third error that Stewart made was when he said I don't like coach T's learning methods. The error in my opinion occurred between the second and last sentence of the first paragraph. The way he would have to fix the error is by take the period out and connects the sentence with a conjunction.
The fourth error was a sentence with a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. He needs to look out is the next sentence he made an error. He brought his car in the picture which again had to do with nothing he said previously.
The fifth error is when he says Mr. T called him his little drama queen it made him very upset. He says he has a lot of drama in his life but he's dealing with it.
The final error is in the last sentence, when he says I deserve a "C" when he did poorly on the essay. I think the teacher didn't care about his situation.
In conclusion, Stewart deserves a non-passing grade due to all the errors he made in his essay. He needs to work on the punctuation part in the English language. Just because you can speak English doesn't mean you can write it. His writing was very much a rough draft. His writing could have been better if he revised it a few times first.
Andrew Yuen
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing both a subject and a verb. There are two types of clauses,independent and subordinate. An independent clause contains a subject and a verb. Subordinate clauses functions as a modifier to an independent clause. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. Three common sentence punctuation errors are the comma splice, run-on sentences and sentence fragments. A fragment is a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. A run-on sentence is two or more independent clauses without the proper punctuation. A comma splice contains two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a "D" on his paper because he makes many sentence punctuation errors.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinating clause or connect it with a comma. He can convert the subordinating clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “If.”
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “His little step by step system for learning.” Pidd punctuates the phrase “His little step by step system for learning" as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence or by converting it into a sentence. To connect the phrase Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. To convert the phrase Pidd must make the phrase a subject and add a predicate.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “When he canters out to his Corvette.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “When he canters out to his Corvette.” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replacing it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction "he."
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. The mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses, “I found this sick arrowhead” and “I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the two clauses he can add a comma after the first independent clause or replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period.
Pidd's failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of spending this time skating, Pidd should learn the rules and concepts of punctuation.
Debbie Adame
sept 14
english 1a
In order to punctuate sentences correctly the writers must understand the rules and concepts of writing. A clause is a group of words containing a subject and a verb. The two types of clauses are independent and subordinate clauses. An independent clause can stand alone as a complete sentence. While a dependent clause needs a subordinate to help it stand as a complete sentence. Although, a phrase is a group of words that do not contain a subject or a verb because there are three common sentence errors and they are a run-on sentence such as a comma splice and a fragment. A run-on sentence consists of two independent clauses without the correct punctuation. A comma splice is a sentence that is only punctuated with a comma. A fragment is a sentence that is missing a verb or subject. As I read the essay I found way too many errors. For this reasons i I think that Stewart deserves a "D" grade (which is not a passing grade).
The first error was a run-on sentence. This happens between skating rules and I rock. Besides having a bad sentence structure he(Stewart) is sounding pretty cocky to me about his skating skills. This sentence seems to have nothing to do with the rest of the essay.
The second error that Stewart makes is between these two sentences “If I skate. I win”. These are both independent clauses. The way I would fix it is by the taking away the period from the first independent clause and put a comma there so the two sentences become one. You should always combine the two sentences that go together, because it makes your writing look better and professional.
The third error that Stewart made was when he said I don't like coach T's learning methods. The error in my opinion occurred between the second and last sentence of the first paragraph. The way he would have to fix the error is by take the period out and connects the sentence with a conjunction.
The fourth error was a sentence with a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. He needs to look out is the next sentence he made an error. He brought his car in the picture which again had to do with nothing he said previously.
The fifth error is when he says Mr. T called him his little drama queen it made him very upset. He says he has a lot of drama in his life but he's dealing with it.
The final error is in the last sentence, when he says I deserve a "C" when he did poorly on the essay. I think the teacher didn't care about his situation.
In conclusion, Stewart deserves a non-passing grade due to all the errors he made in his essay. He needs to work on the punctuation part in the English language. Just because you can speak English doesn't mean you can write it. His writing was very much a rough draft. His writing could have been better if he revised it a few times first.
Marquez Wilson
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “When he canters out to his Corvette.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “When he canters out to his Corvette.” With only a period he can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinating clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate 2 independent clauses, “I found this sick arrowhead” and “I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” Eh can fix this error by separating the 2 independent clauses. To separate the 2 clauses he can either replace or coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or period, or he can add a comma after the first independent clause.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “On” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated 2 independent clauses “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “I deserve at least a C,” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. He can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma or he can replace the comma with a semicolon or period.
Finally, the reason why Pidd does not deserve a passing grade is because of his incorrect use of grammar punctuations. Instead of complaining about the teacher, he should have studied better of sentence punctuations.
Amani Ali
Professor Sabir
English 1 A
11 September 2009
The Tire Slasher
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing both a subject and a verb. There are two types of clauses, independent and subordinate. An independent clause contains a subject and a verb. Subordinate clauses functions as a modifier to an independent clause. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. Three common sentence punctuation errors are the comma splice, run-on sentences and sentence fragments. A fragment is a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. A run-on sentence is two or more independent clauses without the proper punctuation. A comma splice contains two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a "D" on his paper because he makes many sentence punctuation errors.
The first error was a run-on sentence. This happens between skating rules and I rock. Besides having a bad sentence structure he (Stewart) is sounding pretty cocky to me about his skating skills. This sentence seems to have nothing to do with the rest of the essay.
The second error that Stewart makes is between these two sentences “If I skate. I win”. These are both independent clauses. The way I would fix it is by the taking away the period from the first independent clause and put a comma there so the two sentences become one. You should always combine the two sentences that go together, because it makes your writing look better.
The third is Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “I don't like coach T's teaching methods. His little step-by-step system for learning." the mistake occurs between the words "methods" and "his." He punctuates the subordinate clause "His little step-by-step system for learning" with only a period. Pidd can correct the phrase by connecting it to the previous sentence or converting it into a sentence. To connect the fragment Pidd must remove the period after "methods" and add a comma before "his". To make a new clause Pidd must add a predicate.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “When he canters out to his Corvette.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “When he canters out to his Corvette.” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replacing it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction "he."
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “On” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated 2 independent clauses “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “I deserve at least a C,” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. He can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma or he can replace the comma with a semicolon or period.
Pidd's failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of thinking about a way to slash his teacher’s Corvette tires, Pidd should learn the rules and concepts of punctuation.
crystal cervantes
sphe essay
In order to punctuate sentences correctly the writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing a verb and a subject. The 2 types of clauses are independent and subordinate clauses. An independent clause can stand alone as a complete sentence but a dependent clause needs a subordinate to help it stand as a complete sentence. A phrase is a group of words that don’t contain a subject or a verb. There are 3 common sentence errors they are a run-on sentence, a comma splice and a fragment. A run-on sentence consists of 2 independent clauses without the correct punctuation. A comma splice is a sentence that is only punctuated with a comma. Lastly a fragment is a sentence that is missing a subject or verb. While I read the essay I found way too many mistakes that is why I think Stewart deserves a "D" not a passing grade.
One of the first mistakes was a run-on sentence. This happens between skating rules and I rock. Besides having a bad sentence structure he is sounding pretty stuck up to me about his skating skills. This sentence seems to have nothing at all to do with the essay. The second mistake that he makes is between these two sentences “If I skate. I win”. Both sentences are independent clauses. I would fix this sentence by taking away the period from the first independent clause and putting a comma there so the two sentences become one. The third mistake that Stewart made was fragment error. He writes “His little step by step system for learning.” Stewart punctuates the phrase as a sentence. But he can fix this mistake by connecting the phrase to a sentence or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the phrase He must reinstate the period with a comma. To convert the phrase he must add a predicate and make the phrase a subject.
A fourth mistake he made was a fragment error he writes “When he canters out to his Corvette.” Were he punctuates the subordinate clause. Pidd can fix this by turning it into an independent clause or connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause. To connect the clause he needs to exclude the period after the subordinating clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction. His other mistake is a run on sentence. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” The problem occurs between the word “arrowheads” and “and”. But he can fix this by separating the two independent clauses. He makes a last comma splice error he writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” He messes up between “On” and “I” because he punctuated two independent clauses. To fix it he can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them.
In conclusion, he deserves not to pass due to all the errors he made in his essay. He needs to improve a lot on the punctuation part in the English class. Pidd should do more studying and revising instead of devising a scheme of revenge.
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Debbie Lee
Professor Sabir
English 1 A
The Tire Slasher
In order to punctuate sentences correctly the writers must understand the rules and concepts of writing. A clause is a group of words containing a subject and a verb. The two types of clauses are independent and subordinate clauses. An independent clause can stand alone as a complete sentence. While a dependent clause needs a subordinate to help it stand as a complete sentence. Although, a phrase is a group of words that do not contain a subject or a verb because there are three common sentence errors and they are a run-on sentence such as a comma splice and a fragment. A run-on sentence consists of two independent clauses without the correct punctuation. A comma splice is a sentence that is only punctuated with a comma. A fragment is a sentence that is missing a verb or subject. As I read the essay I found way too many errors. For this reasons I think that Stewart deserves a "D" grade (which is not a passing grade).
The first error was a run-on sentence. This occurs on Skating and rules and I rock. This is a sentence added on to the essay to give more details about Stewart but this sentence is not necessary and do not make sense.
The second error is when Stewart said “If I skate. I win.” These are known to be a independent clauses. In stead of using the period between those two sentences, it should be a comma.
The third error is when Stewart said “I don't like coach T's learning methods.” The mistake happens on the second and last sentence in the first paragraph. He should have taken the period out and add on the sentence with a conjunction.
The fourth error is the sentence with a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. He added on subjects that’s not relevant to this argument.
The fifth error is when his teacher called him a little drama queen which made him become upset. He replies that he has a lot of drama in his life.
The last error is on the last sentence when he argued for a C rather then a D because of those his excuse of a bad teacher method of teaching and life drama.
Stewart deserves the grade he received because he needs have a lot of mistake in his English language. He have many punctuation in his sentences and he needs to learn how to make sense in his writing. Also he should try to divided his school and his skating equally so he can get a passing grade and get to skate rather then blaming his teacher for teaching and his life drama.
Sha’Quea Pratt
Ms. Sabir
English 1A
14 September 2009
Passing the Tire Slasher
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing both a subject and verb. There are two types of clauses: independent and subordinate clauses. The difference between the two is that independent clauses can stand alone where an independent clause cannot. A phrase is a group of words that do not have a subject and verb. Three common sentence punctuation errors are a comma-splice, fragment, and run-on sentence error. A fragment is a phrase punctuated as a sentence. A Run- on sentence is a word group containing two or more independent clauses without proper punctuation separating them. A comma splice is a type of sentence error that consists of two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. With this, Stewart Pidd deserves a D on his paper because he makes many punctuation errors.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “His little step-by-step system for learning.” Pidd punctuates the phrase “His little step-by-step system for learning” as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence or by converting it into a sentence. To connect the phrase Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. To convert the phrase to a sentence Pidd must make the phrase a subject and add a predicate.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “When he canters out to his corvette.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “When he canters out to his corvette” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “when”.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low profile tires.” This mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” and “and”. Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses, “I found this sick arrowhead” and “I will stick it into one of his low profile tires.” He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the two clauses he can add a comma after the first independent clause, and replace the coordinating conjunction with a semi-colon or a period.
Pidd makes a comma-splice error. He writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “on” and “I”. Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses, “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “I deserve at least a C” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. He can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma, replace the comma with a semi-colon, or replace the comma with a period. To subordinate one of the clauses, Pidd must add subordinating conjunction to either clause.
Stewart’s failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of criticizing, Pidd should focus on correctly punctuating his sentences.
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