Today in class we read, in the early class, the Introduction to Half the Sky. In the second class we discussed the introduction, as the majority of the class had done the homework. The discussion was fruitful, as we also defined and discussed key terms the authors used to define and narrow their topic. We also looked at what the authors expect from their audiences.
Homework is to summarize the introduction to Half the Sky and bring to class in the morning. Email it to yourself. If you need a general length--250 words or 1 typed page, should be adequate. Make sure the MLA is perfect.
If students in the second class completed their literal paraphrases, then you can post it here for the group or pair. Make sure you also type the original passage and indicate the page number of the page it was taken from.
Tomorrow we will continue practicing paraphrasing. We will also look at how the authors use evidence to support their claims and the smooth way their incorporate direct speech into their discourse. We will then practice doing the same in comments about the introduction to Half the Sky.
Students will practice writing reading logs and look at the concept of Literature Circles. I will also give students a reading log with dates and page numbers.
I plan to take roll at the start of class tomorrow, so try to be on time (smile). For any students in my early class, I am already at 39 students, nine more than I have to take, so if you are one of those persons I promised a permission number to, if you are late, we might have to rethink that agreement.
Other homework is to continue working in SPHE--Confused Words and Sentence Punctuation, along with Plagiarism and Paraphrasing. We will review the exercises Monday; however, if there is ever a question, please bring it up in class. I still don't have an office but I am here on campus every day except Friday, so if you want to meet with me, give me a call. I turn on my cell phone after class (sometimes before--smile).
I appreciate your patience, regarding emailed assignments. I am still under a doctor's care but feeling a whole lot better than last week.
Homework is to summarize the introduction to Half the Sky and bring to class in the morning. Email it to yourself. If you need a general length--250 words or 1 typed page, should be adequate. Make sure the MLA is perfect.
If students in the second class completed their literal paraphrases, then you can post it here for the group or pair. Make sure you also type the original passage and indicate the page number of the page it was taken from.
Tomorrow we will continue practicing paraphrasing. We will also look at how the authors use evidence to support their claims and the smooth way their incorporate direct speech into their discourse. We will then practice doing the same in comments about the introduction to Half the Sky.
Students will practice writing reading logs and look at the concept of Literature Circles. I will also give students a reading log with dates and page numbers.
I plan to take roll at the start of class tomorrow, so try to be on time (smile). For any students in my early class, I am already at 39 students, nine more than I have to take, so if you are one of those persons I promised a permission number to, if you are late, we might have to rethink that agreement.
Other homework is to continue working in SPHE--Confused Words and Sentence Punctuation, along with Plagiarism and Paraphrasing. We will review the exercises Monday; however, if there is ever a question, please bring it up in class. I still don't have an office but I am here on campus every day except Friday, so if you want to meet with me, give me a call. I turn on my cell phone after class (sometimes before--smile).
I appreciate your patience, regarding emailed assignments. I am still under a doctor's care but feeling a whole lot better than last week.
posted by Professor Wanda's Posse at 10:14 AM
24 Comments:
Ashante Washington
English 1A
9-950a
Literal Paraphrasing
Half the Sky-Introduction p.19
"The factories turned out to be cacophonus hives of distaff bees."
literal paraphrase: The warehouses were loud and overcrowded with female workers.
Tony San Nicolas
With Thailea
English 1A
9-950a
Literal Paraphrasing
Half the Sky Introduction
Second Paragraph on Page xii
Original:
"They were kept naked to make it more difficult for them to run away or to keep tips or other money, and they were forbidden to ask customers to use condoms. They were battered until they smiled constantly and simulated joy at the sight of customers, because men would not pay as much for sex with girls with reddened eyes and haggard faces. The girls were never allowed out on the street or paid a penny for their work"
Literal Paraphrase:
They were kept without clothes to make it harder for them to escape or keep money or tips, and they were not allowed to ask customers to use contraception. They were beaten until they smiled and exuded joy at the sight of customers, because men did not want to pay for intercourse with girls that were teary-eyed and emotional. The prostitutes were seldom allowed out on the road or given a dime for their services.
Vanessa Dilworth
Professor Sabir
English 1A 9-9:50am
3 February 2011
Literal Paraphrase: Half the Sky
Quote: Then she lowers her hand and her long fingers gesticulate and flutter in the air with incongruous grace as she recounts her odyssey. (pg. xi)
Literal Phrase: Then the young woman lowers her hand and her long tendons move articulately and move in the wind with refinement as she recounts her adventure.
Andrew Duong
Feb 3, 2011
English 1A 9-9:50AM
Professor Sabir
Paraphrasing: Half the Sky
Original:
"The global statistics on the abuse of girls are numbing. It appears that more girls have been killed in the last fifty years, precisely because they were girls, than men were killed in all the battles of the twentieth century. More girls are killed in this routine "gendercide" in any one decade than people were slaughtered in all the genocides of the twentieth century."
Literal:
World-wide date shows that the abuse of females are deadly. Universal research on women cruelty is shocking. More females have been slaughtered in the previous five decades due to them just being that gender, than males have been killed in all wars combined in the last century. Additional females are often massacred in what we now call a "gendercide" in any ten years than people were murdered in all genocides of the last century.
David Guzman
Professor Sabir
English 1A 9-9:50am
2 February 2011
Page xiii, end of first paragraph
Original:
“She thought a Malaysian policeman was escorting her home when he drove her to the Thai border – but then he sold her to a trafficker, who peddled her to a Thai brothel.”
Literal Paraphrase:
A policeman was supposed to take her to the Thailand border on her way back home. Instead, she was sold to a trafficker; therefore she went into prostitution.
Sherri Short
English 1A
9-9:50
Page XV, Fifth Sentence down from top of page.
Original Sentence:
'Then, the following year, we came across an obscure but meticulous demographic study that outlined a human rights violation that had claimed tens of thousands more lives.'
Literal Paraphrase:
The consecutive year we discovered a little known but thorough survey of characteristics of the human population in the area that pointed out a wrongdoing to the rights of humans that killed well over thirty thousand people.
Sherri Short
English 1A
9-9:50
Correction to page number for Half the Sky paraphrase:
It is page XIV, second paragraph, first sentence.
Summer Hurst
English 1A 9-9:50am
Literal Paraphrase:
Original: "Then she lowers her hand and her long fingers gesticulate and flutter in the air with incongruous grace as she recounts her odyssy"
Literal: Then she descends her hand and her slender fingers move in the wind with lost innocence as she remembers her life journey
David Odza
Engl 1A
9-9:50
2/3/11
Actual Lines: The group, American Assistance for Cambodia, used $400 in donated funds to buy a small cart and a starter selection of goods so that Rath could become a street peddler. She found a good spot in the open area between the Thai and Cambodian customs offices in the border town of Poipet.
Literal Paraphrase: The AAfC, a Cambodian aid group provided a small cart and an initial set of items for Rath to start a buisness; which cost $400 given by supporters. She set up shop in the middle of the Thai and Cambodian customs buildings, on a town in between two countries called Poipet.
Mary Watson
English 1A
9-9:50am
Paraphrasing Page Number xiii First Paragraph:
"There were three others and myself who attempted to balance the board," she says. "the rest were too afraid, because it was very flimsy. I was also afraid, and I was unable to look below, but I was more fearful to not leave. We believed that even if we lost our lives, it was better than not leaving. If we did not leave, we would lose our lives as well."
Kaijie Zhang
English 1A 9-9:50am
2/3/2011
page xiv(paragraph 2)
original sentence: "This study found that thirty-nine thousand baby girls die annually in China because parents don't give them the same medical care and attention that boys receive-and that is just in the first year of life."
literal paraphrase:
The research shows that 39,000 baby girls die every year in China because their parents gave unequal treatment as boys when baby girls got health problem.
Teepian Yu
Benjamin Valles
Ryan Reyes
Professor Sabir
English 1 A
3 February 2011
Page XVII Paragraph 3:
"In the nineteenth century, the central moral challenge was slavery. In the twentieth century, it was the battle against totalitarianism. We believe that in this century the paramount moral challenge will be the struggle for gender equality in this world."
Literal Paraphrase:
In the 19th century, the main ethical obstical was thralldom. In the 20th century, it was the fight against dictatorship. We trust that in this century the predomninant ethical obstical will be the challe nge for sex equivalence around the globe.
Dereje Bizuneh
Prof. Sabir
English 1A
9:00-9:50 am
Feb 2,2011
Parephrase Introduction
"There were four of us who tried to scape" Rath says. "The others were too afried, because it was very likely to fall. I was scared, too, I couldn't be able to see down, but I was even more afried to stay. We understood that even if we died, it would be better than staying there. If we stayed, we will be killed as well.
Tyler Mecozzi
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8A.M.
3 February 2011
The women atrocities that still occur in today's world are unbelievable. The authors discussed how the Chinese people prefer infant boys over girls and how they hesitate to hospitalize their girl if she falls ill. Also what is addressed, are the brothels all over the world. Brothels are clubs where grown men pay to have sex with girls and women alike. The girls, who have been taken away from their families either forced or tricked by some scam, have barely reached maturation. They are raped and beaten until their will power has succumbed to the wrath of their suppressors.
This book does not just cover the brutality women in this world endure. Solutions and reasons why helping women leads to growing success are also included. That is the bright side of this book. If this book just focused on the inhumane treatment of women all over the world, then this book itself would be inhumane. Instead, the authors "will lay out solutions such as girls' education and micro-finance."
With the proper help, women can rise above the abusive restraints their society has cast upon them. They can be thrive in business just like Rath did with her tourist stand. This book brings hope to women who suffer these atrocities by informing the world what is going on, and assuring us that there is something we can do to help.
Alex Peña
Professor Sabir
English 1A 9am
February 3 2011
Literal Paraphrasing “Half the Sky”
Original Sentence: The issues involved, however, have barely registered in the global agenda. (pg: xiii paragraph: 10)
Literal paraphrase: The problems seen, unfortunately, is not top priority in the worlds fix it list.
Submitted By: Audrey Topacio
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8:00-8:50 am
03 February 2011
Original:
Once on the far balcony, the girls pounded on the window and woke the surprised tenant. They could hardly communicate with him because none of them spoke Malay, but the tenant let them into his apartment and then out the front door." (p. xiii)
Paraphrase:
Once on the distant terrace, the women knocked on the window and awoke the startled occupant. they could barely converse with him because not one of them spoke Malay, but the occupant let them into his loft and then out the front door.
Cody Henneman
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8:00-8:50
3 February 2011
Paraphrase
Original
"Rath's saga offers a glimpse of the brutality inflicted routinely on women and girls in much of the world, a malignancy that is slowly gaining recognition as one of the paramount human rights problems of this century."
Paraphrase
Rath's journey shows a segment of the gamut that occurs to females in many countries, a problem in which is gaining more publicity as a really big problem for humanity."
Julie Phoukeo
Professor Sabir
English 1A
8:8:50
3 February 2011
Literal Paraphrase: Half The Sky
Original: Page xii
“Once on the far balcony, the girls pounded on the window and woke the surprised tenant. They could hardly communicate with him because none of them spoke Malay, but the tenant let them into his apartment and then out its front door.”
Literal:
When the girls were on the balcony, they banged on the window and suddenly woke the shocked occupant. They did not understand him because the girls did not know Malay, but he let them go through his apartment to the front door.
Jeffrey To
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8:00-8:50
3 February 2011
Paraphrase 3 sentences
Original page xvii
We believe that in this century the paramount moral challenge will be the struggle for gender equality around the world.
The owners of the thai brothel to which Rath was sold did not beat her and did not constantly guard her. So two months later, she was able to escape and make her way back to Cambodia.
Paraphrase.
We accept that in this century the predominant righteous obstacle will be the fight for male and female to have the same rights around the world. The people in charge of the thai brothel where Rath was changed to did not harm her or watch her.After two months, she was cable to get way and return to Cambodia.
Zinaida Dzhilavdaryan
Professor Wanda Sabir
Literal parathrasing
English 1 A
February 5, 2011
1. Introduction
Original sentence:
“As the Pentagon gained a deeper understanding of counter-terrorism, and as it found, that dropping bombs didn’t do much to help, it became increasingly interested in grassroots projects such as girls’ education”.
Literal paraphrase:
Since US Homeland Security experts are more knowledgeable of the protection from terrorist’s attacks, and since it’s obvious, that fighting is not enough, they are concerned about more essential programs such as schooling.
2. Chapter 1
Original sentence:
“We are talking about 3 million people who in effect are the property of another person and in many cases could be killed by their owner with impunity”.
Literal paraphrase:
It is about 3 million of the world’s population who are basically belonging to their owners, and most of the times they are murdered, and their killers avoid punishment.
Adrieanna Williams
Professor Sabir
English 1A/8-8:50
3 February 2011
Original page xiii
Rath's saga offers a glimpse of the brutality inflicted routinely on women and girls in much of the world, a malignancy that is slowly gaining recognition as one of the paramount human rights problems of this century.
Paraphrase
Rath's personal account presents a brief look of the atrocity forced upon regularly on women and girls on many parts of the globe, a malice that is gradually growing awareness as one of the leading humanity obstacles of our time.
Erin Callahan
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8-8:50
Feb, 6 2011
Litteral Paraphrasing: Half the Sky
Original:
This is a story of transformation. It is change that is already taking place, change that accelerate if you"ll open your heart and join in.
Paraphrase:
This book is about metamorphosis. This revolution and regeneration is happening now and will further advance if you will lend your compassion and participate.
Ronald Parker
Professor Sabir
English 1A 8-850
8 February 2011
Literary Paraphrase: Half The Sky
Original : The saga of Kasturba Nagar is unsettling with no easy moral.
Paraphrase :It was shocking to see women going through such abuse for so long and finally one individual standing up for herself. it wasnt easy for her or easy for the men to accept what she had done.
Adalie Villalobos
Professor Sabir
English 1A
10 February 2010
Literal Paraphrase
Original:
"As soon as she had gotten her fix, Momm wanted to leave the brothel." 39
Paraphrase:
When Momm got her fix, she tried to leave the brothel soon after.
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