Today in the 1-2:50 class we practiced paraphrasing sections from Mair's essay, On Being a Cripple. For the most part students did excellent work. Some of the selections were harder than others to paraphrase. If anyone wants to post their paraphrase please feel free to do so. Include the original and the literal paraphrase.
We then read the Brent Staples's essay from 50 Essays and after discussing it a bit, practiced summarizing. Students ran out of time and so we worked together on a 3 sentence summary (smile).
In BS's classic essay JWonB. . . he shares his experience with racial profiling. He compares himself to a beast stalking his prey--white women, all women and how he had to transform himself to still the terror his physical presence unintentionally causes when he dare occupy "public spaces."
It is a bit spruced up from the original (smile).
In the 4-5:50 p.m. we read the Staples's essay and completed literal paraphrases of selections. Students posted the literal paraphrases here with the original.
Also, in the 4-5:50 class we had a chance to work in Stewart Pidd's Paraphrase Progressions and Summary Secrets.
Before class ended we shared literal paraphrases. Students posted their paraphrases before they shared. This exercise is a work in progress.
1. Paraphrase vs. summary
2. They Say-- pp. 40-41, Ex. 1&2. Cyber Assignment, posted below. Bring to class too to share.
3. Stewart Pidd's Paraphrase Progressions and Summary Secrets (we didn't get to in the 1-2:50 class)
4. Reading Homework-- 50 Essays; Chapter 3 in They Say (skim)
5. Field Trip 2/26 to see Tim Wise at the University of San Francisco, 4:30 p.m. (It's free. Tim Wise is a political writer, whose latest book is called: Dear White America: Letter to a New Minority.) I am going. Let's talk Monday.
Here is a link to the event:
Tim Wise to Speak on “Colorblindness” at USF
2130 Fulton St., San Francisco, CA, 94117
San Francisco,
CA
We then read the Brent Staples's essay from 50 Essays and after discussing it a bit, practiced summarizing. Students ran out of time and so we worked together on a 3 sentence summary (smile).
In BS's classic essay JWonB. . . he shares his experience with racial profiling. He compares himself to a beast stalking his prey--white women, all women and how he had to transform himself to still the terror his physical presence unintentionally causes when he dare occupy "public spaces."
It is a bit spruced up from the original (smile).
Also, in the 4-5:50 class we had a chance to work in Stewart Pidd's Paraphrase Progressions and Summary Secrets.
Before class ended we shared literal paraphrases. Students posted their paraphrases before they shared. This exercise is a work in progress.
1. Paraphrase vs. summary
2. They Say-- pp. 40-41, Ex. 1&2. Cyber Assignment, posted below. Bring to class too to share.
3. Stewart Pidd's Paraphrase Progressions and Summary Secrets (we didn't get to in the 1-2:50 class)
4. Reading Homework-- 50 Essays; Chapter 3 in They Say (skim)
5. Field Trip 2/26 to see Tim Wise at the University of San Francisco, 4:30 p.m. (It's free. Tim Wise is a political writer, whose latest book is called: Dear White America: Letter to a New Minority.) I am going. Let's talk Monday.
Here is a link to the event:
Tim Wise to Speak on “Colorblindness” at USF
Tuesday, Feb 26 4:30p
2130 Fulton St., San Francisco, CA, 94117
This public lecture is based on his book, Colorblind: The Rise of
Post-Racial Politics and the Retreat from Racial Equity, and is free and
open to the public. During his time at USF, Wise will speak about the
harmful effects of colorblindness and what he calls “illuminated
individualism” — acknowledging the diverse identities that have shaped
peoples’ perceptions and the role that race continues to play in the
United States today.
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Paraphrasing In Class Assignment.
Kevin and Ernest.
When the sun sets on the populated streets of Brooklyn where I reside, I frequently encounter women who stereotype me as the type of person who would put them in danger due to my race. They remain expressionless while tensely clutching their belongings close to themselves as if though they were expecting to be mugged or worse.
Original essay entry.
"After dark, on the warren like streets of Brooklyn where I live, I often see women who fear the worst from me. They seem to have set their faces on neutral, and with their purse straps strung across their chests bandolier-style, they forge ahead as though bracing themselves against being tackled."
Spencer Stevens Kira Gillooly
Pg.386
Over the years, I learned to suppress the anger I felt so frequently for being taken as a villain. Not to do so would have certainly led to havoc. I know to go out of my way to look more friendly.
Original :
Over the years, I learned to smother the rage I felt at so often being taken for a criminal. Not to do so would surely have led to madness. I now take precautions to make myself less threatening.
Jarunee Lepnark
Amanda Wright
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 4-5:50
Paraphrase Brent Staples
It is not altogether clear to me how I reached the ripe old age of twenty-two without being conscious of the lethality nighttime pedestrians attributed to me.
Staples still unsure of how it took twenty-two years before realizing that pedestrians were deathly afraid of him at night.
"Where fear and weapons meet--and they often do in urban America--there is always the possibility of death." (Paragraph 2)
Paraphrase: The culture in America today has evolved into defense and violence, where in defending one's self may lead to death when dealing with weapons.
Isabel Capristo
Erick Martinez
Dekey Sangmo
Ngoc Huynh
Karen Badua
Professor Sabir
English 1A M/W 4-5:50
20 February 2013
Paraphrasing "Just Walk on By: Black Men and Public Space" by Brent Staples
Original:
It was in the echo of that terrified woman's footfalls that I first began to know the unwieldy inheritance I'd come into-the ability to alter public space in ugly ways. Page 383
Paraphrased:
Brent Staples is a harmless man who had been mistaken as a danger because of his race; he comes to this realization when a white woman misreads his actions and runs away from a nonexistent threat.
Enrique Barboza
Harold Pedroso
Temuujin Batulzii
English 1A 4-550PM
Paraphrasing
Original
It was in the echo of that terrified woman's footfalls that I first began to know the unwieldy inheritance I'd come into - the ability to alter public space in ugly ways. (Brent Staples 383)
Paraphrasing
Unfortunately, racial profiling caused him to be treated different in public
Original
It was clear that she thought herself the quarry of a mugger; a rapist, or worse. (383)
Paraphrasing
She clearly thought she was going to fall prey to a social menace
Cecilya Alanis
Professor Sabir
English 1A M/W 4-5:50
20 February 2013
pg 385
Original:
"It is not altogether clear to me how i reached the ripe old age of twenty-two without being conscious of the lethality nighttime pedestrians attributed to me."
Paraphrased:
I'm not real sure how i attained the mature age of twenty two ,without being aware of the malicious intent the late evenings community wish to bestow upon me.
Cecilya Alanis
Professor Sabir
English 1A M/W 4-5:50
20 February 2013
They say cyber assignment
1. Death Penalty, Nobody should ever be put to death, even after their freedoms have been taken away. Not having contact with loved ones, and the simple out door pleasures, (many of us take for granted) should be punishment enough.We should never lower ourselves to the standard that the prisoner themselves lived by while they had freedom. This would make us no better then the prisoners we are sentencing.
If you have made a choice to take someones life then the state of which you committed the crime has every right to take your life in return. The simple pleasure of which the family had taken from them. such as: hearing a loved ones laugh , or face again is something they will never see again. Its is only fair that the person who commits the crime suffers the same way. When the choice of taking a life was made , the choice of freedom was also taken away. Some evils were not meant to be on this earth.
2.Serving in Florida
by : Barbara Ehrenreich
Barbara talks about her days as a waitress. How the restaurant business easily turns into a small community . A community with his own major, (manager)citizens, (employees)laws, and rumors. Barbara expresses that the employees do all the work while the manager simply observes and ridicules.One of Barbara's main points was even with two jobs most employees counting herself had unfortunate living situations. Everyone's making just enough to get by, not enough to comfortable live.
Miaoping Zhong
Solongo
Professor Sabir
English 1A M/W 4-5:50
23 February 2013
Paraphrasing "Just Walk on By: Black Men and Public Space" by Brent Staples
Original: “As a boy, I saw countless tough guys locks away; I have since buried several, too. They were babies, really-a teenage cousin, a brother of twenty-two, a childhood friend in his mid-twenties-all gone down in episodes of bravado played out in the streets.” (385)
Paraphrased:
As a child, I watched numberless difficult men put into prisons. I also entombed some. They were infants, exactly- adolescent kinfolk, a buddy who was twenty-two, and an acquaintance that I knew as a child of twenty-six, each of them crashed in incidences of self – approbation when they had fun outside.
Joshua Harvey
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A Mon. & Weds. 4-5:50 pm
2/22/2013
They Say Chapter 2: Exercises 1
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Corrected paraphrase assignment
Jarunee Lepnark
Amanda Wright
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 4-5:50
Paraphrase Brent Staples
It is not altogether clear to me how I reached the ripe old age of twenty-two without being conscious of the lethality nighttime pedestrians attributed to me.
Paraphrarse:
I'm still unsure of how it took me up to the mature age of twenty-two years not realizing the deathly image people walking in the evening gave to me.
Enrique Barboza
English 1A 4-550PM
They Say I Say Exercises 1 and 2 Pages 40-41
Exercise #1
Topic: Gun Control
State legislators emphasize that there is a need for gun control in the United States. The recent rise of tragic events involving firearms has startled citizens nationwide. Law makers demand for tougher legislation in obtaining firearms and ammunition, instant background checks and the reintroduction of an assault weapon ban. Legislators encourage neighboring states to adopt stricter laws to stop firearms from falling into the wrong hands.
There is no doubt that the recent tragic events involving firearms has startled our nation. The National Rifle Association and law abiding citizens, do not deny there is a need for background checks to screen for disturbed individuals, but deny the recommendation for stricter gun control laws. The NRA believes that stricter gun control does not stop a determined individual to cause havoc. The NRA recommends issuing conceal carry permits to law abiding citizens to defend themselves from harm.
Exercise #2
Serving in Florida by Barbara Ehrenreich
In Barbara Ehrenreich's essay, Serving in Florida, she writes about waiting tables in Florida and she decides to get a second job to make ends meet. Unfortunately, she is unable to handle both jobs. She describes her and her coworker's living and working conditions, which are not very ideal. She emphasizes that even though they are all employed, they are all living in impoverish conditions.
Enrique Barboza
Harold Pedroso
Temuujin Batulzii
English 1A 4-550PM
This is a redo for Paraphrasing
Original
It was in the echo of that terrified woman's footfalls that I first began to know the unwieldy inheritance I'd come into - the ability to alter public space in ugly ways. (Brent Staples 383)
Paraphrase
It was in the sounds of the scared lady's steps that I started to notice the awkward legacy I'd come into- the capacity change common domain in terrible ways
Amit Dhingra
Professor Sabir
English 1A 1-2:50pm
24 February 2013
They Say/ I Say pg. 40+41
Ex. 1
Taxing the rich excessive due to the fact of them having more money is just wrong. They work hard for their money and every one should be charged an equal amount. There are many people that find this unjust but shouldn't everyone be treated equally?
Taxing the rich more than the average person is very important for a healthy economy. They make more money and should be taxed accordingly to that fact. It may not be equal but neither is charging them the same amount.
Ex. 2(Regarding the Pain of Others by Susan Sontag)
Pictures can be very tragic for people because they can bring back memories that we might not want to remember. Veterans seeing the image of trenches can really shock them into remembering their horrible time spent without access to supplies. Also, pictures can be very misleading by making things look better than they appear. Pictures can bring pain to others by bringing memories that were forgotten.
Pictures are a very valuable and important part of our society today. They let us see how others have grown when they are far from each other. They also make things look better so it is very admirable. Pictures help you remember people that you cannot see on an everyday basis and keep them close. Pictures have really helped us see with a different view.
Jarunee Lepnark
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A 20131, 4pm-5:50pm
Date: 22, February 2013
They Say Pg. 40 Exercise 1
Can Money Buy Happiness?
They say that money can’t buy happiness and more money, more problems, is also a common
saying. People who make a wealthy living by ripping the less fortunate people off, are filled with guilt
even though their bank accounts are filled with money. There are rich people who are lonely because
they don’t have time to find someone special to spend it with. What if you had all of the money in the
world but had terminal cancer, would you still be happy?
There are many celebrities who are wealthy beyond belief but if they were happy, why would they
turn to self-destructive behavior and even suicide? Some even steal the things that they can easily
afford which could jeopardize their career. Their wealth doesn’t make them happy.
Money cannot buy happiness because money cannot clear a guilty conscience, it cannot make
someone truly fall in love with you, and it certainly cannot cure all disease.
Can Money Buy Happiness?
Many have said that the rich keep getting richer and the poor keep getting poorer. They also say
that if you are not worried about making money to survive, you are more likely to pursue your dreams
and make a living doing something that you’re happy doing. Money can buy food to feed the hungry and
buy toys for the less fortunate children during Christmas. Money can also buy airline tickets to bring
loved ones together to make happy memories. If you do not have money to purchase the basic
necessities, you are struggling to survive and cannot be happy.
The rich are more privileged to the nicer things in life. They can also afford to buy healthier foods that
will prolong their lives so they can make more happy memories with their loved ones. Wealthy people
are happy people because they have the power to buy happiness for others by donating to charities.
Money can definitely buy happiness because it can take you beautiful places to make you forget about
your worries. Money can make someone you love happy when you can buy them something to make
them feel special. Money can help you get the best medical treatment to help you live a happier life
because you’re healthy.
Karen Badua
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A M/W 4-5:50
25 February 2013
Exercise #1
Topic: Abortion
Where does life begin?
It starts when an egg and sperm meet and create a soul. No matter how small something is, it carries life. Whether life is found in a fly, an ant, or a single cell life is all around us. The debate is going on today is abortion. Is it morally right? Most people would say abortion isn't a sin, but the truth is god hates killers. If congressional officials continue to uproot abortion laws, the world would be doomed. Pro-choice is morally wrong. What about the lives of those children they are allowing to be murdered? They are doomed souls. Doctors who choose to participate in killing a baby are monsters. How can anyone choose to extinguish the fire of life? It is baffling.
The lives we live are beautifully tragic. Not everyone is born with money or a home or even parents. Not everyone has enough money to support a child, let alone their selves. If we outlaw abortion what will become of future children of people who cannot support a family? Can society allow another homeless child? The streets will consume the abandoned children. They need suitable, livable environments. Abortion is a sensitive subject to tackle because there are horrors to every story. The third trimester abortion is the worst of its kind since the embryo has developed into a baby. Typically, the only time abortions are allowed in the third trimester are when the mother's health in weening. Unwanted pregnancies, in some cases, includes rape. Is society going to force a rape victim to carry a monster's baby? Abortion is not just black and white. Abortion is also not the only answer. There are other options and sometimes there are not. There's not much one can do. Life is beautifully tragic and as humans we must accept that. We can't always allow for the bible to govern the public.
Miaoping Zhong
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 1A
Lec4-5:50MW
25 February 2013
They Say I Say Exercises 1 and 2 Pages 40-41
Exercise #1
According to definition of Fatalism which is “a Belief that every event is predetermined and, irrespective of the attempts to influence it, could not have happened otherwise.” People don’t have power or will to change the facts that happen in the future. Fatalism is a negative belief that makes people has a negative and submissive attitude to face those things that are good or bad. For example, if a person was predetermined as a poor man, he can’t be a rich man whatever he did in his life.
Exercise #2
Serving in Floridaby Barbara Ehrenreich
“Serving in Florida”, written by Barbara Ehrenreich, stated how people had hard and limited living conditions when they lived in the low-wage situations in Florida. Ehrenreich described her two jobs experience as being a waitress in the restaurants. For example, Ehrenrich could not pay her rent in her first restaurant because of her low income. In addition, she didn’t have break time in the second restaurant since the business was very busy. As a minimum wage pay -worker, she emphasized that employees couldn’t have enough and satisfied living condition even though how hard they worked.
Emily Walters
Professor Sabir
English 1A 1-2:50pm
24 February 2013
They Say/ I Say pg. 40+41
Exercise 1: Should the Age of Voting be 18
On November 2, we vote as a country. This day is important for the United States; it impacts our future! Growing up in this country you look forward to the day when you turn 18 years of age, however, at this age are you really ready to make decisions that pertain with shaping our future as a country. Some may say yes, but the majority our not ready or have no idea how to even vote. In the society point of view you are considered an adult, but the question that surfaces is can you make important decisions?
November 2 only comes once a year. All your life you look forward to the day when you turn 18 years of age. When you become this year of age, in the society viewpoint you become an adult. An ongoing debate in our society today is that at this age you legally are eligible to vote if you are a United Sates citizen. As a country we vote and have a say in our government. At the age of 18 you become responsible enough and shouldn’t you get to take part of our decisions as a country for the future? Eighteen years of age is the appropriate age and even if the person may not have the background or no how to vote, the individuals around them can help them and can take part in one of our countries important days, Election day Day!
Exercise 2: Serving in Florida by Barbara Ehrenreich
Barbara Ehrenreich essay, Serving in Florida is about a women who is trying to make ends meet on such a low income. While serving tables in Florida she has to get a second job to make enough money to live. Often times we think we can handle so much, yet we in most cases cannot. This was the case for Barbara. Ehrenreich goes into detail and expresses that yes she was making money and did have some income coming in, but it was still difficutlt to make ends meet. Often times we take things for granted, I know I do, and we don’t realize that someone else may be suffering and striving from pay check to pay check.
Amanda Wright
Professor Sabir
English 1A 4-5:50
27 February 2013
They Say p.40
Exercise 1: Is abortion wrong?
Till this day many debate whether abortion is right or wrong. Some protest the right to choose while others that it is murder. I do not deny that there are other alternatives to abortion, adoption being one of them. I can't also imagine telling a rape victim that she is wrong if deciding to have a abortion. I believe what is ones belief is not another's. Where there is freedom of religion there is also freedom to choose.
I believe women have the right to choose. Women should not be judged if they do decide to have an abortion. I strongly support those women who are victims of crime to have the right to make that choice. How is it that we came to judge those who have abortions when they are not committing any crime.
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