Today students completed their Social Entrepreneur essays. Don't forget to post your self reflections and responses to classmates portfolios. Many students did not have abstracts, which makes it hard to respond.

I want to thank English 1A, 9-9:50 AM, for agreeing to be an audience for the English 1A students who hadn't completed their presentations today.

When I last checked, there were only two abstracts posted, no self-reflections.

Reminder: the essays were due by today. If anyone is missing an essay he or she is not passing the class. Check your email for grades. Everything will be graded by or before Monday, May 23. I have graded Pidd essays for some students. Ask me for them Monday.

If you don't want to come in Monday, just call me between 9-12, and I will look at your portfolio. Don't forget to paste it.

We will meet in A-232 on Monday to review the portfolio assembly. Today I handed out copies of the portfolio checklist.

Cyber-Assignment on Social Entrepreneur Presentations

Today's presentations went exceedingly well. Congratulations to everyone, especially English 1A, 9-9:50 AM. When technology failed one group regrouped well without it!

Post the abstracts here and comments, self reflections and comments on each presentation.

Tomorrow we wrap up. Read the chapters on revision handed out.

Today in class we will try to get through most if not all of the presentations. Please rehearse in advance.

I have a couple of chapters from a textbook I used to use on revision for students to read to give them a bit of background on the topic.

The book is: Writing with a Thesis: A Rhetoric and Reader. Tenth Edition, by authors, Sarah E. Skwire and David Skwire. The publisher is Thomson Wadsworth 2008 in Boston, MA.

I am not making anymore deals with students. If the work isn't in or if it is in and not up to par, you are out of luck. Next week's workshop is for students who have completed all of their work and are ready to assemble their portfolios.

More on narrative essays
The portfolio narratives (These are essays)

1. The narrative will look at the 18 weeks, the themes we looked at this semester,
women and empowerment.

What have you learned about yourself this semester? What have you learned about the discipline you are studying here: reading and writing that you plan to carry forth into your lifelong pursuit of learning.

Please also comment on the texts and whether or not they were helpful in this process. You can also talk about the instruction, culture of the class and the teacher. You can also offer suggestions.

2. The second part of the narrative looks at the writing process and what you have been learning about yourself as a writer. Take two essays and talk about the planning, research and revision strategies you used. It helps to choose an early paper and compare to a later paper. Often you can more easily see the differences in your writing and a better example of mastery of certain concepts. Also discuss skills you need to improve and how you plan to address that.

Additional narrative considerations for the portfolio essay:

The second essay has students look at the writing process and discuss their own writing process: the topics chosen, the information used, revision strategies, writing as a process. This should include a definition of the difference between editing and revising and a value statement on the place for both in composition.

I am really interested in discourse about audience and how that shapes or determines how the writer approaches her topic.

I am also interested in discussion of the revision process, and whether or not seeing writing as a work in progress or a draft, liberates or stagnates the creative process. (Students are to use examples from their writing to illustrate these points.)

I'd also like students to think about and give at three specific ways how they have grown as writers and thinkers this semester. Each essay should be minimally 1-2 pages (250-500 words).

We will work on portfolio assembly, Monday, May 27, 9-12 noon, in A-232. If there is a final being given there, call me to find our location.

Portfolio Checklist

Name _______________________________
Address ____________________________
Phone number________________________
Course______ term ________and code 20218, 20219 (circle one)

This page can serve as you table of contents. If an assignment doesn’t look familiar just put N/A on the line. If you are missing work you know you turned in, make sure you let me know.

If there is work you have done which is not listed, please add it at the end. Thanks!

May 23 9 AM to 12 PM A-232
Portfolio assembly workshop _______________

Portfolio Due Date

Portfolios due by Friday, May 27, 12 Noon electronically. Make sure you receive a receipt for your submission. No paper copies, no exceptions.

Grade Justification

What grade do you think you've earned this semester? What evidence supports this conclusion?


Portfolio Narratives

1. Self-reflection on 18 weeks of study (250 words minimum).

2. Self-reflection on revision strategies (250 words minimum).
For assignment description, see earlier posts. Each narrative essay is to be minimally 250 words. For the second essay, use two essays as examples. Cite them in a works cited page. Also, site two other sources, one can be the video: Revision Strategies the other can be a Grammar Style Book like Diana Hacker's Rules for Writers. The Bedford Handbook is on the desktop of the labs in the LRCregarding the revision process as part of the writing process.

Stewart Pidd Hates English Section
Just list the grade or score

Grammar Exam 1, March 2010 _____/50
Grammar Exam 2 May 2010 _______/50

Midterm Synthetica (Pronoun Case) _______
Revision ____________

Essay Exam 2 Possessives_______
Essay Exam 3 Parallel Structure________

Sentence Structure ________, Pronoun Agr._______, POV _______, Be-verbs______, SV Agr._______

Paraphrase pkg. _____________
Cyber assignments, in-class assignments___________

Half the Sky

Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis _________
First Draft _________
Final Draft Grade __________
Revisions (how many? Grades?) __________

Pidd-type essay grade__________or narrative _______________

Please include in this section peer comments and self-reflections (how many?)_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________


Half the Sky freewrites (how many?)_______ and reading logs (how many_______(if typed include them) and grade on reading logs ________

Include peer responses and self-reflection ___________
Cyber assignment attached to this assignment (250 words) __________

War Stories
Poetry of War __________

Book Report

Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis___________
Final draft grade__________
Revisions__________________
Pidd-type essay grade ____________or Narrative________________

Book Report presentation___________
Peer reviews (how many?)_________________

Book Report Presentations
Grade is an “A” for all presentations or “-0-“ for opting out. The presentation is a quarter of the grade for this assignment

Abstract___________
Self-reflection__________
Feedback_____________


Social Entrepreneur

Planning Sheet _____________
On-line Frontline World (on-line responses 3) Post them here

Library Research sheet: _______________(if you did it)
List of sources (5) minimum in MLA format (post here)

Essay: Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis__________
First Draft __________
Final Draft Grade ______________
Revisions _____________
Pidd type essay ________________ or narrative ____________


SE Presentation date ___________
The presentation is a quarter of the grade.

Cyber-Essays:
New Hero essay responses (some collaborative)(Mimi Silbert, Albina Ruiz, Muhammad Yunus) ____________

Other Assignments:
Woman I Admire essay ___________


Cyber-Assignments
How many?__________ (They are listed below)


Teacher research

Can I use your work in presentations and publications? Would you like to be anonymous? If I plan on using your essays or work in a book, I will let you know and share any proceeds.

Yes, I agree.
No, do not use my work.

Final Grade

Portfolio checklist _____________
Portfolio Essay 1_______________
Portfolio Essay 2_______________
Portfolio Grade_________

Course Grade_________



Cyber-Assignments Recap

Some of these assignments are grouped as a part of the other essay portfolios. Do not list them twice.

JANUARY 24, 2011, Response to letter

JANUARY 23, 2011, Response to syllabus

JANUARY 26, 2011 REFLECT ON PRESIDENT OBAMA'S STATE OF THE UNION ADDRESS

Extra Credit:
FEBRUARY 02, 2011

FEBRUARY 03, 2011, SUMMARIES OF THE INTRODUCTION TO HALF THE SKY

FEBRUARY 15, 2011 CYBER-NARRATIVES ON LOVE

FEBRUARY 24, 2011, CHARACTER PROFILES CYBER-ASSIGNMENT

FEBRUARY 28, 2011, POST 5 SIGNAL PHRASES AND 3 BLOCK QUOTES FROM HALF THE SKY. INDICATE THE PAGE NUMBERS AND LIST THE MEMBERS OF THE GROUP WHO PARTICIPATED.

MARCH 01, 2011, CYBER-ASSIGNMENT GROUP ESSAY, WHAT DOES AN EMPOWERED WOMAN LOOK LIKE?

MARCH 09, 2011, WATCH FILMS BY WOMEN IN THE MUSLIM WORLD

Extra Credit:
MARCH 10, 2011, MARILYN BUCK AND WILD POPPIES (Genny Lim) HTTP://WWW.FREEDOMARCHIVES.ORG/WILDPOPPIES/INDEX.HTML

MARCH 17, 2011 POST YOU RESPONSES TO A POEM FROM THE WAR POEMS PACKAGE HERE.

MARCH 21, 2011, CYBER-ASSIGNMENT: THE NEW AMERICAN SOLDIER

MARCH 21, 2011PUBLISHED BOOK REVIEW CYBER-ASSIGNMENT

MARCH 21, 2011 FRONTLINE WORLD: ENGAGED CITIZENRY CYBER-ASSIGNMENTS (SE portfolio)

MARCH 22, CYBER-ASSIGNMENT: What is a SE re: Mimi Silbert

MARCH 24, 2011, POST A SUMMARY OF THE BOOK REVIEW.

MARCH 31, 2011 CESAR CHAVEZ REFLECTION

APRIL 06, 2011 Student responses to presentations

APRIL 12, 2011 REVISION STRATEGIES.

Extra Credit:
APRIL 14, 2011 DEMOCRACY NOW

APRIL 14, 2011 MOTHER EARTH'S BIRTHDAY PARTY.

APRIL 25, 2011 LIVING ON THE FENCE LINE. VISIT HTTP://ALONGTHEFENCELINE.COM/

MAY 05, 2011 MUHAMMAD YUNUS ESSAY: CREDIT IS A HUMAN RIGHT. (Include this with the SE portfolio in cyber assignments)

MAY 10, 2011 ALICE WALKER'S WE ARE THE ONE'S WE'VE BEEN WAITING FOR, "CHILDHOOD" (31-37).

Wednesday, May 11, Alice Walker, The Pause from We Are the Ones.

Porfolio Essays for Spring 2011

Note: Some students are still not submitting their assignments correctly: pasted in the body of the email and attached. If a student doesn't send the portfolio to me correctly and when I send it back for corrections, she or he doesn't see it, the grade will be a zero.

Portfolio Narratives

For students who are interested in starting the portfolio essays now, here are the questions which serve as the introduction to the portfolio.

The portfolio narratives (These are essays)

1. The fist narrative will look at the 18 weeks, the themes we looked at this semester: women's empowerment and friendship. Talk about what you've learned and discovered this semester about writing, college and life, which have transformed or changed you.

What have you learned about yourself this semester? What have you learned about the discipline you are studying in this class: composition and reading that you plan to carry forth into your lifelong pursuit of learning?

Please also comment on the texts and whether or not they were helpful in this process. You can also talk about the instruction, culture of the class and the teacher.

2. Essay 2 discusses the revision process. Use the video, Revision Strategies (posted here) as a start. Also include a scholarly reference re: the revision process like Diana Hacker (The Bedford Handbook or Rules for Writers -- the Bedford Handbook is on the desktop in the Open Lab and Writing Center).

Besides the two essays you use as evidence to discuss your revision process, I also want you to reflect on that first essay on a woman you admire and your classmate's comments, the book report essay and the social entrepreneur essay.

We have already started the narrative on revision (check past cyber-assignments). Each narrative essay needs to be 250 words minimally.

The checklist will list all the assignments, but you know what they are. On the check-list include the assignment grade. All the essays included in the portfolio are graded essays except for the final essay on TKW.

If anyone would like help assembling the portfolio bring the assignments electronically I will let you know when I am available finals week.

3. Cyber-Assignments that are not connected to one of the essays will have their own section. Start collecting them now as it takes a while to go through all of the posts. There is a section on the portfolio for these assignments.

4. Freewrites: Type your in-class freewrites. This is another section for your portfolio. Some freewrites are also cyber-assignments.

5. Extra credit. If you have written any essays this semester for extra credit they would go in this section.

6. Evaluation: There is a course evaluation for the class which is optional. I also ask if I can use any of your work for academic research.

This is a preliminary checklist.

Today, our freewrite looked at the chapter in Alice Walker's We Are the One's We've Been Waiting For, "Childhood" (31-37). Homework is to complete the meditation. Students were asked to reflect on the chapter. I read it aloud in the first class. In the second class, only one student completed the Pidd exams in time to work on it.

Three students in the early class did peer reviews. In the second class only one student had an essay, so she emailed me.

What else? We will complete the Pidd work tomorrow, so be in class on time for the Grammar Quiz and Essay Exam 3. There is no make up Thursday. The Social Entrepreneur essays are due tomorrow; this is an extension from last week. All the outstanding revisions are also due this week.

We will have a final peer review tomorrow as well.

On the SE essay, the only revisions will be for those students who do not write a passing essay and if you are a lucky winner of this dubious prize, then you will have to identify all the errors and write a correction essay as well.

We will practice writing portfolio essays Thursday. I will pull up portfolios for students to see. We will have a portfolio assembly session next week for those students who are finished with everything and during finals week. We have to figure out when.

It is my normal times: MW 10-12 A-232 and W 3-5 PM A-205. Your writing should have gotten better. Give me your best work, not rough drafts. Everyone only gets one, line by line edited copy. I don't think it helps writers when I do this too often. You should be able to do this yourself.

We completed the final essay exam today. Some students also completed the Grammar Exam 2. I am expecting 50 out of 50.

Students are to bring in the Social Entrepreneur essays tomorrow. We will meet in A-232.

Bring in the Alice Walker handout for the next few days. We will complete it. There is one more Pidd essay due, SV AGR. It is not a test and students can email it to me by Thursday, May 12, 2011.

If you make too many errors on any of the remaining essays: book report or SE, even HTS, you will have to write a correction essay. If any of the errors we have penalized Stewart Pidd on this semester show up in your essays, you will be dinged where it hurts--the GPA.

Pay attention to details. Do not send me drafts. I will not be giving students line by line comments for anymore essays. Learn from your errors and do better. For the SE essay, you get the grade you get after one revision with a correction essay.

The two portfolio essays cannot be revised. I made copies of the play Ruined and I really wanted to read it (smile).

Post the Muhammad Yunus essays here with the thesis: Credit is a human right.

Today we reviewed the following:

1. Revisions for HTS and the Book Report essay. Students met with me to review comments. In the future, ask me sooner, I am reading a lot of essays and if you wait a long time to get back to me, I might not remember all the details. Also students were not opening my attachments which are easier to read than Microsoft comments as footnotes.

Believe it or not, there are still students who have not gotten their essays into me, I am talking about first drafts. Do not wait on me to call you. If the essays are not in and you plan to complete the class you must complete them before the SE essay is turned in. I have extended the due date for those who need it to next Wednesday, May 11, 2011.

In my second class, students have completed their SE essay. Presentations are now scheduled for the final week of class: Monday-Tuesday, May 16-17, 2011. We can probably get through them in one meeting. Let me know if you need technology next week.

If you have completed your essays already, you can send them to me by Tuesday, May 10, 2011. This will give students time to get help in the Tutoring Center. Get your tutor to give you a receipt --electronic is best, but we'll take paper (smile). The final draft is due for the rest of the students (those who needed more time, Wednesday-Thursday, May 12-13).

The essays are due into me by Thursday, May 13, 2011, 12 noon.

2. SPHE-Complete the PS essay templates and SV AGR essay templates as well. We will complete these two essays next week, along with Grammar Exam 2. Review all the chapters for this exam: Possessives, Parallel STR., SV AGR.

3. SE essay, share with classmates: outline, planning, drafts

4. If you plan to make a presentation as a group, let me know and give me the abstract with all the student names listed. Also plan to give classmates a copy as well.

5. For those students who have completed the SE essays, we will work on the portfolio essays in class.