Wednesday, May 23, 2012

Social Entrepreneur Self-Reflection and Comments Cyber-Assignment

Assignment:
Reflect on what worked well and what you learned from this second presentation. Comment on the strengths of the student presentations you observed.

Include these reflection(s) and peer comment in your Social Entrepreneur section of the portfolio. There is a section for you to check this off and include it with the essay.

My comments
Today students presented their social entrepreneur essays as individuals and in teams. I was impressed by the breath of talent and skill students demonstrated. Mimi Silbert and her Delancy Street Foundation presentation with Hoan, Mark, Dejanae and Colleen was really good. I loved the way they each took a part of the story and how they responded to questions. They were well-prepared.

Despite technical challenges John and others muscled through. I liked the idea of John profiling his super mom, Linda Sills and GIN (smile). I am looking forward to checking out the program link which wouldn't load in time. I liked Alison's presentation as well. I didn't get to see the brochure and Adrienne and her daughter had to be the prize awardees for the cutest couple. The baby felt quite at home and I appreciate students' indulgence and support of their classmate.

I liked Courtney and Danishia's style and passion. The way Courtney stumbled upon her project was a great lesson in mindfulness, and Danishia's passion for Rose Rios's Ministry makes me want to look her up the next time I am in LA.

Nezha's Tracey Weitz was also a lesson in reciprocity in that, Ms. Weitz's work impacts her community at home in Sudan. I like the way, this semester, Nezha let us know in her choice of books (Midnight) and topics for her essays, her dual culture and how this is often in conflict with American culture and how she manages to reach a place where she can find balance and peace. I hope Nezha will keep us posted so we can see her the next time her dance company performs (smile).

Jovita's subject was also really interesting. I hadn't known Asian and Pacific Islanders make up the largest community suffering from domestic violence. However, when one looks at the breath of such community one can see how this is the case: Asia is a large place and if one includes the Far East and Near East, South Asia, etc. then no other ethnic group has such numbers.

There is a performance at Union Square this weekend, Friday-Monday, March 25-28, 2012 at sundown or 8 PM. PUSH Dance Company is performing work which looks at choreographer, Raissa Simpson's dual heritage as a Filipina and African American woman. She uses water as the metaphor and historic events in her grandparents lives on both sides to create: Bitter Melon. I had her on my radio show Monday and rebroadcast it this morning: www.blogtalkradio.com/wandas-picks It is a free event for the entire family.

Dan's presentation was an extension of his book talk. I am adding his book and other's on my to read list this summer. I found it interesting that his entrepreneur was a first as were others profiled this morning. I saw a film this semester as a part of the Asian American Film Festival about the woman who brought judo to America and women's judo to the world community. The film is called: Mrs. Judo: Be Strong, Be Gentle, Be Beautiful. Here is an interview with the director: http://www.blogtalkradio.com/wandas-picks/2012/03/09/wandas-picks-radio-show

Cupcake Brown was the topic of two presentations, Adrianna's and Kenneth's, which were so different, refreshingly different. I liked the poster Adrianna made, the chart Ana, Jason, and Alison made for the presentation on Dr. Raye Mitchell. Once again, each person had a personal spin on the SE which made the talk fascinating.

Cliff bars? Who would have known the person responsible for this nutritional treat has done so much and that she is also the Luna bar lady? I known WISE and didn't know she was involved with this great organization either. Savannah Conley's presentation (considering her confessed lack of sleep) was excellent.

Students raised the bar high and no one lowered it an inch this morning in an extended final--8:15ish to 11:30ish.

Whitney's presentation about Mazanita School's Katherine Carter, was really inspiring, considering how many Oakland schools have closed and how poor a record they have. Her enthusiasm was contagious.

I appreciated Flora and Jamie's willingness to accept criticism and agree to expand their research or direction.

Kathleen's guest, Sonia Brooks was icing on the cake. Perhaps we should always have a guest entrepreneur during the course of the final paper presentations. I liked having her here for some of the presentations before hers. Operation Hope sounds like a ship (smile). And perhaps I am like Gilligan stranded on a desert island, but I certainly don't plan to be here long with such resources available.

Well, I have to run now. Good luck on the portfolios. I will let you know if there is anything missing. Look for an email or a call (you do not want me to call you) Tuesday sometime. I have 4 classes to wade through.

If students are turning their work in Friday, I will respond Friday first. If there are any problems or you do not hear from me Tuesday-Wednesday, call me. Do not assume all is well.

Thursday, May 17, 2012

I will post the rest of the rest of the portfolio checklist later today.
Today it was a wrap. We spent the first half an hour writing the first narrative essay for the portfolio. The second 20 minutes we cited the video I showed you and the two chapters from Writing with a Thesis, Chapters 7 1/2 and 8 1/2.

Students also need to cite the Hacker handout from The Writing Process: 3a Make global revisions: Think big.

Don't forget to also include They Say, I Say in the citations for the second narrative on revision and your writing process.

Again, what you do not cite, put in the bibliography. For the essay you have to cite at least two sources, perhaps three, 1-2 of your essays and 1 scholarly source on revision strategies and why they are important.

Tuesday, May 15, 2012

1. Portfolios

2. The Write Course: "Revision Strategies"--video

3. Homework --read two handouts of revision from Writing with a Thesis (Skwire and Skwire)

4. Tomorrow: evaluating a website--SE check-in and review (w/me)

5. Thursday, portfolio narratives. Questions --final book report presentations (if we have time, otherwise, students can present Wednesday, May 23, 2012, 8-10 AM in A-202.
Portfolio Checklist 2012 DRAFT

This checklist can serve as the table of contents. Put a check next to the items to show inclusion in the portfolio. Use as the second page to the portfolio, after the cover sheet. Where there are questions for the section, students can post the answers to the narrative there. Number the pages with a header.

Name ______________________________
Date ______________________________
Class including class code and semester ____________________
Address _______________________________________
Phone number __________________________________
Email address__________________________________

Course codes: 21757
Class Meetings: Jan. 25—May 17, 9-10, MTWTh

Final Exam & and Portfolio Due Date: Wednesday, May 23, 2012, 8-10 AM (Portfolios due via e-mail by Friday, May 25, 2012, 12 noon. Students can submit the portfolios earlier.)

May 21 9 - 12 noon; 1-3 p.m.
Drop-in Portfolio assembly workshop in A-205 _______________

Portfolio Due Date
Portfolios due via e-mail by Friday, May 25, 2012, 12 noon. Students can submit the portfolios earlier electronically. Make sure you receive a receipt for your submission. No paper copies, no exceptions.

Grade Justification
What grade do you think you've earned this semester? What evidence supports this conclusion?

1. Portfolio Essay 1 Reflection on COA Spring 2012, Professor Sabir’s English Class_______

The narrative will look at the 18 weeks, the themes we looked at this semester such as women’s empowerment.
What have you learned about yourself this semester? What have you learned about the discipline you are studying here: reading and writing that you plan to carry forth into your lifelong pursuit of learning.

Please also comment on the texts and whether or not they were helpful in this process. You can also talk about the instruction, culture of the class and the teacher. You can also offer suggestions.

2. Portfolio Essay 2 Reflection on revision process__________________

Look at the writing process and what you have been learning about yourself as a writer. Take two essays and talk about the planning, research and revision strategies you used. It helps to choose an early paper and compare to a later paper. Often you can more easily see the differences in your writing and a better example of mastery of certain concepts. Also discuss skills you need to improve and how you plan to address that. Include the Write Course Video: Revision Strategies, the two chapters from Writing with a Thesis, and Diana Hacker in your bibliography and also site at least one in your analysis of your revision process. Also cite your essay(s) used as examples in this second essay.

Additional narrative considerations for the portfolio essay:

The second essay has students look at the writing process and discuss their own writing process: the topics chosen, the information used, revision strategies, writing as a process. This should include a definition of the difference between editing and revising and a value statement on the place for both in composition.

I am really interested in discourse about audience and how that shapes or determines how the writer approaches her topic.

I am also interested in discussion of the revision process, and whether or not seeing writing as a work in progress or a draft, liberates or stagnates the creative process. (Students are to use examples from their writing to illustrate these points.)

I'd also like students to think about and give at three specific ways how they have grown as writers and thinkers this semester. Each essay (1 & 2) should be minimally 1-2 pages (250-500 words).

Social Entrepreneur Portfolio

Planning _____________

Library Research sheet _______________(if you did it)
List of sources (5) minimum in MLA format (post here)

Essay: Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis__________
First Draft (peer review)__________
Final Draft Grade ______________
Revisions (How many?)_____________
Pidd type essay ________________ or narrative ____________

SE Presentation date ___________
Self-reflection __________
Classmate responses __________

Cyber-Assignments:
Frontline World ___________
Muhammad Yunus ___________

Half the Sky

Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis _________
First Draft _________
Final Draft Grade __________
Revisions (how many? Grades?) __________

Pidd-type essay grade__________or narrative _______________

Please include in this section peer comments and self-reflections (how many?)_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________


Half the Sky freewrites (how many?)_______ and reading logs (how many_______(if typed include them) and grade on reading logs ________

Include peer responses and self-reflection ___________
Cyber assignment attached to this assignment (250 words) __________

War Stories
Poetry of War __________

Book Report

Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis___________
Final draft grade__________
Revisions__________________
Pidd-type essay grade ____________or Narrative________________

Book Report presentation___________
Peer reviews (how many?)_________________

Book Report Presentations
Grade is an “A” for all presentations or “-0-“ for opting out. The presentation is a quarter of the grade for this assignment
Abstract___________
Self-reflection__________
Feedback_____________

Other Assignments:
Woman I Admire cyber-essay ___________


Mighty Be Our Powers Essay Portfolio


Final Draft of Essay __________
Initial Planning Sheet (IPS)___________
Outline __________
Peer Review Response to Discussion Questions_________
Peer Review using Microsoft Comment__________
Cyber Assignments connected to Mighty________
They Say Assignments connected to Mighty
Freewrites if this applies, to Mighty
Reading Logs

They Say, I Say____________ (How many?)
Post Assignments here that you were to post on the blog, write out or share________
With regards to the They Say assignments connected to your writing, post an annotated copy of your essay. Use colors to note what you are looking at. For example, if you were noting the naysayer in your essay, highlight those passages that reflect this thinking.


Additional Cyber-Assignments
How many?__________ (Post here in the Portfolio)


Teacher research

Can I use your work in presentations and publications? Would you like to be anonymous? If I plan on using your essays or work in a book, I will let you know and share any proceeds.

Yes, I agree.
No, do not use my work.

Final Grade

Portfolio checklist _____________
Portfolio Essay 1_______________
Portfolio Essay 2_______________
Portfolio Grade_________

Course Grade_________

Thursday, May 10, 2012

Today's presentations with students: Stephen, Mike, James, Hoan, Jovita and Sulekha were awesome! Absolutely amazing! Okay, it's spring and I think I've got the spirit (smile). I wanted to let students know that you get bonus points for the presentation that help with the essay grade. If you do well on the presentation, then I will take this into account in the essay itself. I will not let you slide re: MLA, but I will let the presentation boost grades. If you have a B-, you will get a B, a C- will translate as a C, an A- into an A.

Get all the outstanding essays into me by Wednesday. I will not read any essays for the first time in the final portfolio which will contain all your work. Monday, we will finish the presentations: Jamie, Kenneth, Kennedy, DeJanae, Courtney and one other person (smile).

Make sure your abstracts are posted along with the answers to the questions. Post responses to the presenters in the same place you posted last week. Presenters, do not forget your self reflections.

Mention the presenter and their book in each comment. You can group comments by book authors or themes, if you like.

Wednesday, May 09, 2012

Today students shared their plans and 5 resources for their social entrepreneur essays: John, Colleen, Daniel, De'Janae.

Afterward students were given Exercise 55-3 MLA documentation: identifying elements of sources. Complete the handout for homework. Bring to class so we can review it. We will do a couple other exercises on MLA citation tomorrow from Hacker on-line if we have time.

Our first task will be to complete the book report presentations. If the abstract posted does not reflect your current essay or intent, re post it today.

Homework: Keep working on SE essay. Next week we will wrap up the semester, work on revisions. If there are any essays outstanding, they need to be in by Wednesday. I will not read any essays for the first time in the final portfolio, except the SE essay.

Next week, if any student has a draft of the SE essay ready by Tuesday-Wednesday, I will read it and give you feedback.

The following week, Finals Week, I will set up a portfolio workshop, so students can drop by and assemble the portfolio with me.

Tuesday, May 08, 2012

Today we are using one of the Ode articles to respond to chapter 12, Reading for the Conversation (Graff and Birkenstein 145). Post your short essay response here. Respond to one student response by extending the conversation.

Homework

Bring in all your social entrepreneur data and research and writing.

Monday, May 07, 2012

Homework

Two posts

Your Essay
Turn in your book report essay with comments from peer today if you have not already done so. Include the peer review with the final draft.

If you are still waiting for comments or do not have comments from a peer, let me know. In another post, send me the peer review and the student essay.


Peer Review Comments and the Student Essay

Send me a copy of the comments sent to the student whose Book Report essay you peer reviewed based on the questions generated from They Say, I Say two weeks ago.

They Say Assignments

Read in They Say, I Say, chapters "I Take Your Point" (141) and "What's Motivating this Writer?" (145). Review chapters 9 & 10 pages 121 and 129.

We will go over the exercises in class tomorrow 132, 135-136, 137-138, 142, 143, 144.

Today I spoke to students about how they were doing in the class. Today is the last day I can drop students with a W. If you have questions, call me this afternoon or text me.
Cyber-Assignment

Write a response to the presenters. Presenters, write a self-reflection on the book report presentation. What worked. What you learned about yourself as a reader and a writer. What you plan to do differently next time.

Respond to each student presentation separately by name. Include a heading on each post as well. Note the student's abstract/planning sheet, etc.

Wednesday, May 02, 2012

Today we started our presentation on the Book Report Essays. The presenters today were Kathleen, Ana, Flora and Dan. They all did a wonderful job.

Make sure you bring in your book. Dan brought in an audio tape and we listened to a bit (nice touch). Keep the presentations short (1-3 min.)