I will be at the college today from 10-12 and 2-4/5ish. Graduation is tomorrow. Congratulations to everyone! I will be at the ceremony to honor you. If any students are having difficulties, call me. Also, if there are any assignments, like Pidd, still without grades that you know you turned in, post the essay in the portfolio. I have a lot of Pidd essays to return. Students can pick them up in A-232 today and/or call me. If they do not need revision, I can post the grade on the checklist.

I'll be around Tuesday, May 25, 2010, from 10 AM to about 1 PM, maybe longer.

Note extended due date for portfolio: Friday, May 28, 2010, 12 noon.

Email portfolios to: COASabirEnglish1A@gmail.com

In the subject line write: STUDENT NAME Portfolio English 1A (8-9 or 9-10) SPR 2010 Class Code ...

Portfolio Checklist

Name
Address
Phone number
Course, term and code
Course codes: 23043/23044


This page can serve as you table of contents. If an assignment doesn’t look familiar just put N/A on the line. If you are missing work you know you turned in, make sure you let me.

If there is work you have done which is not listed, please add it at the end. Thanks!

Portfolio Narratives

1. Self-reflection on 18 weeks of study (250 words minimum).
2. Self-reflection on revision strategies (250 words minimum).
For assignment description, see earlier posts. Each essay is to be minimally 250 words. For the second essay, use two essays as examples.

SPHE

Grammar Exam 1, March 2010 _____/50
Gramar Exam 2 May 2010 _______/50

Midterm Synthetica March 2010 (Pronoun Case) _______
Revision ____________

Essay Exam 2 Possessives_______
Essay Exam 3 Parallel Structure________

Sentence Structure ________, Pronoun Agr._______, POV _______, Be-verbs______, SV Agr._______

Paraphrase pkg. _____________
Cyber assignments, in-class assignments___________

Half the Sky

Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis _________
First Draft _________
Final Draft Grade __________
Revisions (how many? Grades?) __________

Pidd-type essay grade__________or narrative _______________

Please include in this section peer comments and self-reflections (how many?)_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________


Half the Sky freewrites (how many?)_______ and reading logs (how many_______(if typed include them) and grade on reading logs ________

Presentations
Women’s History Month presentations: Monday, March 31__________
Include peer responses and self-reflection ___________
Cyber assignment attached to this assignment (250 words) due April 1, 2010__________

War Stories
Poetry of War March 17 __________

Book Report
Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis___________
Final draft grade__________
Revisions__________________
Pidd-type essay grade ____________or Narrative________________

Book Report presentation___________
Peer reviews (how many?)_________________

Book Report Presentations: Monday-Wednesday, April 19-21
Grade is an “A” for all presentations or “-0-“ for opting out. The presentation is a quarter of the grade for this assignment

Abstract___________
Self-reflection__________
Feedback_____________


Social Entrepreneur
Planning Sheet _____________
On-line Frontline World (on-line responses 3) Post them here

Library Research sheet: _______________(if you did it)
List of sources (5) minimum in MLA format due Monday, April 26 (post here)

Essay: Planning Sheet, Outline, Thesis__________
First Draft __________
Final Draft Grade ______________
Revisions _____________
Pidd type essay ________________ or narrative ____________


SE Presentation date ___________
The presentation is a quarter of the grade.

Cyber-Essays:
Love Essay__________
Love presentation____________
New Hero essay responses (Inderjit Khurana, Mimi Silbert, Albina Ruiz, Muhammad Yunus, Maria Teresa Leal, Kailash Satyarthi) ____________

Other cyber-assignments
Felicia Pride's book, The Message (how many?)________________
Martin King Sermon Response (Love Your Enemy)___________
International Women’s Day_____________(3/8)
Alehouse (poetry book responses)_________
More than 1 Million Women Are Missing essay(extra credit) _____________
Argumentation_______
Revision Strategies_________
Ellipsis & Block Quotes _______(3/17)
Block Quotes and Signal Phrases________(3/15)
Summaries_________(1/27)
Dev. Thesis sentences_________(3/11)
Letter to President Obama re: State of the Union_______
Literal and Free Paraphrases (1/27)________
Response to introductory letter________
Response to syllabus _________
Lysistrata___________


Anything else?________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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Extra Credit essays: Half the Sky event, Mirrors in Every Corner. Speak Out: Tim Wise, Pistols and Prayers, SFIFF, other?_____________________


Grade Justification

What grade do you think you've earned this semester? What evidence supports this conclusion?

Teacher research

Can I use your work in presentations and publications? Would you like to be anonymous? If I plan on using your essays or work in a book, I will let you know and share any proceeds.

Yes, I agree.
No, do not use my work.


May 24 10 A to 2 PM A-232
Portfolio assembly workshop _______________

Portfolios due: between Wednesday, May 26 and Friday, May 28, 12 Noon electronically. Make sure you receive a receipt for your submission. No paper copies, no exceptions.


Final Grade
Portfolio checklist _____________
Portfolio Essay 1_______________
Portfolio Essay 2_______________
Portfolio Grade_________

Course Grade_________

Today's presentations were outstanding! Congratulations to everyone for completing the course. Now for the hard part ... no, the portfolios should be easy. I am still at the college. It's 7:10 PM and I have an engagement at 7:30 PM in Berkeley. I was able to see many students today and was pleased at the growth in their writing over the course of the semester.

I am looking forward to conferring high marks on each of you who have committed him or herself to excellence. I'll have the checklist up sometime before sunrise (smile). I have to run now. The checklist will follow the assignment sheet I gave students over a month ago.

Again, congratulations! I was kind of worried on my way to work this morning, thinking about the papers I waded through just a day ago. One student told me that he gave me a fast draft and when he looked at it, he realized it could have been a lot better. His social entrepreneur essay was an A without a revision. It was that good.

Keep impressing me.


Oh, the Pidd treatment essays are great. I really like Alex's, Cristian's, also Leonardo's and Nseke's. These essays are your finals on Pidd.

The presentations kept getting better and better. Remember, the SE essay is about the person, so if you focused too much on the organization, you will have to revise it to meet the assignment.

Only two students who profiled men asked me in advance, the one student who didn't had compelling enough reasons for me to let it slide (enough to not make him write the essay again. I also happen to be feeling good about everyone today) ... however, students should know, not responding to the assignment given usually receives an failing grade.

Thanks for your patience. I hope to see you at the Portfolio Workshop on Monday, May 24, 2010, 10-2 in A-232, and if you can't make it, please call me and email me drafts to review.

Email portfolios to: COASabirEnglish1A@gmail.com
In the subject line write: STUDENT NAME Portfolio English 1A (8-9 or 9-10) SPR 2010 Class Code ...

Unless the three essays were perfect, that is, received passing grades without revision instructions, students have to use the Stewart Pidd template for revision to write an essay about an essay revised: Half the Sky, Book Report, or the Social Entrepreneur essay.

For each essay students were to indicate in a narrative what changed between drafts. The Stewart Pidd treatment is the final essay for SPHE and can be included in the portfolio. It should proceed the final draft.

Remember, the portfolio does not include any new essays except the first two narratives.

We will continue with presentations on Thursday, May 20, 2010. If students did not present their research essays: Social Entrepreneur essays, this is the final opportunity to do so.

Tuesday-Wednesday, students can catch up on posts, work on the portfolio essays and revise essays.

Don't forget the portfolio workshops.

Final Days, Portfolio Narrative Assignment
The portfolio narratives (These are essays)

1. The narrative will look at the 18 weeks, the themes we looked at this semester, women and women's empowerment. Talk about what you've learned and discovered this semester about writing and yourself, college and life, which have transformed or changed you.

What have you learned about yourself this semester? What have you learned about the discipline you are studying here: reading and writing that you plan to carry forth into your lifelong pursuit of learning.

Please also comment on the texts and whether or not they were helpful in this process. You can also talk about the instruction, culture of the class and the teacher.

2. Besides the two essays you use as evidence to discuss your revision process, I also want you to include the Half the Sky essay, the book report essay and social entrepreneur essay. We have already started the narrative on revision. Each essay needs to be 250 minimally words. Check previous posts.

You have a copy of the assigned essays this semester. The check-list is the same with grades posted next to the assignment. We will look at this the last day of class. Bring all your work to class.

Abstracts

Post an abstract or brief summary of your social entrepreneur essay here. Each student needs to read all of the posts and be prepared to actively participate on Monday, May 17, 2010. Being visuals. We have a projector and a screen. PowerPoint presentations are okay. Talk to Mr. Sami Ali samiali@peralta.edu about technology needs. Look at the equipment in the classroom in advance.

Today we reviewed the major essays and peer reviewed first drafts of the SE essay. Today is the last day I can drop students who are not passing. I am dropping students whose work and attendance are sketchy. If you are one of these students who want a grade rather than a "W" let me know so I can add you back. I am speaking of students who missed quizzes 2 and 3 and essay exam 2, have not gotten revisions back to me on the Half the Sky essay or the book report essay.

We will continue revision essay tomorrow and doing the peer reviews. We will also write essay exam 3.

Some students spoke to me but of those students, some have not upheld their ends of the bargain, so I am dropping you. You need to be in touch with me, if you plan to miss class.

I will show you a video on Argumentation on Wednesday, and after peer reviews, I'd like to continue reading Lysistrata (smile). The SV Agreement essay is due next Tuesday, May 18, 2010. We will review it sometime this week. Students can turn it in early. You are held responsible for the information.

Today in class we continued workshopping essays: Half the Sky and the book report essay, as well as, Pidd essays (I returned POV and Possessives). Students shared their initial planning sheets and outlines with each other and with me. Students should turn around the revisions as quickly as possible. Many students are missing classes and/or coming in fifteen minutes before class is over.

For the remainder of the class we are using class time to revise essays, peer reviews. When students arrive in class this is the plan. Take advantage of this opportunity to get one-on-one assistance from me and from peers. It's not every class where students get to spend class time writing and rewriting.

Some students have not followed the assignment and were profiling men. The social entrepreneur essay is has to be about a woman. If you want me to make an exception, it needs to be compelling.

We reviewed the essay in Pidd this morning in the second class, by request, to make sure all the errors were identified correctly. We will probably write the essay, after completing the quiz in the morning.

We'll spend the second part of the class reading Lysitrata. There will be an in-class writing assignment connected to Lysistrata.

Lystistrata

Today we talked about "argumentation," in light of Greek playwright Aristophanes hilarious "Lysistrata," who has a unique and clever suggestion to end the war. We read aloud and will continue this week to read the play finishing up either Thursday or Monday.

We talked about the inductive proof and deductive proof, that is moving from specific eveidence to the conclusion or inductive reasoning or looking at a more general statement and a paticular instance of the generality to see if it shares qualities like those stated about a fish or a college student.

I got kind of lost in the college student example of a deductive argument.

Community College students are from the following populations: retired, high school graduates, reentry adults.

Wanda is retired.

Wanda is a community college student.

This argument is not necessarily true, in fact it is false, because all retired students are not community college students.

I read students the following notes and the play can be found at the following URL. If anyone wants to be the voice coach and help us with pronunciation, you can have extra credit. Also, if any students wants to in the responses I'd like you to post daily, want to add historical and other such information about the play and the characters and the war mentioned, you can also have extra credit.

Cyber-freewrite
Just reflect on the play, it's characters, the premise and the process of reading and listening today.

Homework is to bring in drafts of the Social Entreprenuer essay. Follow the assignment directions. One student wrote an essay on a man. You need to talk to me if you want to change the assignment and have a compelling argument to justify it.

Some students are taking too long to get the revisions into me; you only have 1-week and I need all the graded parts. Type the templates for the Parallel Structure essay. If you have any Pidd essays outstanding you only have until Thursday to get them into me. To pass the class, you have to pass all the essays. Three are essay exams: Pronoun Agreement, Possessives, and Parallel Structure. You have to make arrangments with me to take the exam and this needs to happen between May 4-10.

Lysistrata
http://www.theatredatabase.com/ancient/aristophanes_005.html
http://drama.eserver.org/plays/classical/aristophanes/lysistrata.txt (the play)

LYSISTRATA, the third and concluding play of Aristophanes' War and Peace series, was not produced till ten years later than its predecessor, the Peace, viz. in 411 B.C. It is now the twenty-first year of the War and there seems as little prospect of peace as ever. A desperate state of things demands a desperate remedy, and the Poet proceeds to suggest a burlesque solution of the difficulty.

The women of Athens, led by Lysistrata and supported by female delegates from the other states of Hellas, determine to take matters into their own hands and force the men to stop the War. They meet in solemn conclave, and Lysistrata expounds her scheme, the rigorous application to husbands and lovers of a self-denying ordinance--"we must refrain from the male altogether." Every wife and mistress is to refuse all sexual favours whatsoever, till the men have come to terms of peace. In cases where the women must yield 'par force majeure,' then it is to be with an ill grace and in such a way as to afford the minimum of gratification to their partner; they are to be passive and take no more part in the amorous game than they are absolutely obliged to. By these means Lysistrata assures them they will very soon gain their end. "If we sit indoors prettily dressed out in our best transparent silks and prettiest gewgaws, and all nicely depilated, they will be able to deny us nothing." Such is the burden of her advice.

After no little demure, this plan of campaign is adopted, and the assembled women take a solemn oath to observe the compact faithfully. Meantime as a precautionary measure they seize the Acropolis, where the State treasure is kept; the old men of the city assault the doors, but are repulsed by "the terrible regiment" of women. Before long the device of the bold Lysistrata proves entirely effective, Peace is concluded, and the play ends with the hilarious festivities of the Athenian and Spartan plenipotentiaries in celebration of the event.

The drama has a double Chorus--of women and of old men, and much excellent fooling is got out of the fight for possession of the citadel between the two hostile bands; while the broad jokes and decidedly suggestive situations arising out of the general idea of the plot outlined above may be "better imagined than described."

This article is reprinted from Aristophanes: The Eleven Comedies. Trans. Anonymous. London: The Athenian Society, 1922.

Cyber-Freewrite

We watched the video: Revision Strategies (The Write Course). Please reflect on the video in a narrative that considers your revision strategies. How has Stewart Pidd Hates English affected your revision process?

Why is the opportunity to revise a welcome one for advanced writers? Why do some writers dread such assignments?

Use examples from the film. How is revision defined and what steps are offered? How is re-writing a step in the writing process? What did the scholar, Sandra Pearl, mean about editing prematurely?

What myths did Dr. Linda Flowers say about the "perfect draft syndrome"? Are you so afflicted? What is writer based prose vs. reader based prose? What is inspiration?

What did you learn about the writing process that you didn't know before, or if you knew it, you were not about to articulate it before now?

We will complete the film in the early class in the morning. There are about 10 minutes left.

Global Revisions
Go on-line and look at www.dianahacker.com/rules
Resources for writers and tutos>Preparing to visit the writing center

www.dianahacker.com/rules
Writing exercises>E-ex 3-1 and 3-2

Peer Reviews
Today in class we are sharing our social entrepreneur pre-writing. Bring it to class. See the assignment schedule for due dates. The essay is due this week.